HS #2 RP: "The First True Encounter"

Yukio Blaze
Main Eventer

WFWF Record: 58-54-03-02

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HS #2 RP: "The First True Encounter" Feb 23, 2006 22:46:55 GMT -5

Post by Yukio Blaze on Feb 23, 2006 22:46:55 GMT -5

The silent sound of a clock tick, tocking is heard in the background of a empty office building. Cubicles fill the room, each unique in there way. Some has picture's filled on the small wall's, some are left blank, and some cubicles doesnt even have wall's. Tick, tock continues, but now a low pitch hum is heared and it's revealed that in one of the cubicles a computer was left on, or was it ?. It's revealed that Yukio Blaze is sitting in the cubicle with the turned on computer. He is sitting in a very nice computer chair, twirling around in it like a kid in a candy shoppe. He continue's to twirl in the chair and he then speak's...

Yukio:This is the perfect environment for anyone to work in. A basic monday thru friday, nine to five work day's, something I would enjoy to do, but my work environment is a very dangerous one. Go in night in and night out wrestling your heart out to not only get paid, but to entertain wrestling fan's everywhere. We, the wrestling community work about three hundred and fifty day's a year and wrestle just about anywhere in the world, from Albany, New York to entertaining the troop's in Iraq. Now I know your wondering why in the blue hell am I talking about a work environment and not a wrestling match, well ill talk about that in a moment. Now give me just one moment

Yukio twirl's the chair to stop in front of the computer. He then type's something in, but it's not seen what he has typed. He keep's his eye's peeled on the monitor and pop up's the WFWF website. He scroll's the mouse over to WFWF live event's and click's on it. On the screen, it say's WFWF House Show number two for 2006 and in bold lettering it state's that there will be a match between Yukio Blaze vs Saku. He just set's his eye's on the page and then talk's.

Yukio:Yep, that's right for the first time ever it will be Yukio Blaze, myself vs Saku in a one on one match. Now we have technically be in one other match together and that was last year and it was the last match that the former faction of the UIA as a group effort. It was Me, Josh, and Stuart vs Saku, Jaysin, and LXP. Now team WFWF did get the win so you can say I have gotten one win over him, but people come up to me asking why did I take on such a match like this and I tell them that if I face someone like Saku, who is the current co holder of the International title, a two time International champion, and a former tag team champion, that if I could get the win over such a person, then I could go from now being a mid card jobber, to getting more title shot's in the WFWF. Now that is what I want. I for once would just like to get the win over a highly decorated WFWF wrestler. I've tried my damnest to get the National title, no success, the Young Gunn's title, no dice and when I first entered a WFWF ring I even tried to defeat Saku's former partner in crime Immune, but as everyone know's I didnt get the win.

Yukio take's a pause just for a quick moment and then begin's his final speech

Yukio:So Saku, I dont have a win over you, nor do you have a win over me, that is why I will do my damnest to make this first encounter memorable. I will not fight like some third rate bitch, I will come at you at full force and I will hold nothing back. Dont be shocked if I could somehow beat you and I will not be shocked if you beat me. I know if I lose against a man like you it mean's something, I could come at you again hungry for a win. That what make's me drive, get's me going. That's why they call me the Heartstoppa and the Headline Ripper. I just dont know when, how, and where to stop. Be prepared because a raging wildfire is coming to your small mountain town, and it's not going to stop anytime soon............

Yukio click's the page off and just sit's looking at the blank monitor.....

Yukio Blaze Main Eventer WFWF Record: 58-54-03-02 Joined on: Dec 15, 2004 21:50:34 GMT -5 Posts: 4,515	HS #2 RP: "The First True Encounter" Feb 23, 2006 22:47:36 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by Yukio Blaze on Feb 23, 2006 22:47:36 GMT -5 Well this is my house show rp for the 2nd show and I hope you all like it.

TZ
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HS #2 RP: "The First True Encounter" Feb 24, 2006 17:52:40 GMT -5

Post by TZ on Feb 24, 2006 17:52:40 GMT -5

This was better than your last RP, but there is still room for improvement.

First, you did a good job of setting the scene when it came to description, but you really need to elaborate on things a whole lot more. Like, go into detail about the surroundings, just don't describe the, "important" parts. Everything is important when it comes to the scene. You have to give the reader a good picture, and if you add a lot of detail you will do that. However, the setting you used, and the idea you had with the computer was alright to be honest. I mean, it was a good way to set up the whole RP, and it is nice to see you are able to do that. I just feel that too many people have been using computers in their RP's lately.

You need to do some about your dialouge. It really needs its own flare. Plus, I think you should add in a lot more before going straight into talking about the match. You did a good job adding in the history, but there needs to be more. When you got to talking about the match itself with Saku you went right into, "generic-mode". We know you want to beat him. Give things your own unique flavor. People like that.

It's good to see you aren't getting up. Just keep trying. Trust me, you'll get it. It just takes longer for some.

Post by Yukio Blaze on Feb 23, 2006 22:46:55 GMT -5

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Post by TZ on Feb 24, 2006 17:52:40 GMT -5