DXW Live Episode 1

I like the commentary team of Dave Prazak and Steve Corino. Prazak is probably the most underrated PBP man ever. I do question why you're shortening his name to DAP and not DP, and chuckle that it's still a sexual innuendo. Don't google "DAP" kids. trust me.

I can immediately say, read back through your stuff. Not just for spelling and typo errors, but for things that sound awkward. Like saying 24 seconds of chanting was enough. That's far too specific and a random thing to be specific about. And it reads really awkwardly. The whole promo from DeVante reads kind of awkwardly, in fact. Like talking for an extended period about WWE and talking about kind of fourth wall stuff. And as someone who's well versed in piracy, I can say that publicly mentioning ANY torrent site in a positive light, much less endorsing downloading your competition from The Pirate Bay, is a major bad move. If you haven't watched it, watch TBP:AFK. It's a fantastic documentary and tells the story of The Pirate Bay very well and also gives a general perspective of some of the behind the scenes of that sort of site. What goes on. I can tell you having ran a similar but much smaller scale site briefly, it's a very true documentary.

Don't put quotations around move names. it's not needed. That emplies sarcasm. As if it's a fake collar and elbow tie up. Also don't capitalize move names. They aren't proper names, unless it's a specific wrestler's move. For example, a suplex wouldn't be capitalized, but a Perfect Plex would.

I assume your spacing issue comes from pressing enter in whatever typing program you're using and those spaces not aligning with Proboards. Let Proboards do your spacing for you. Just double enter at the end of a paragraph.

Make sure you're completing your thoughts as well. You tend to drift off a little bit mid sentence. The opening match was good aside from the presentation flaws though.

Definately make sure you're running a spell checker. I'm not sure what program you're typing your show in, but use something with a spell checker. I'm finding simple typos that a spell checker would catch without problem.

I would've liked to see Chuck Taylor and Joey Ryan go a little bit longer. It really puts Joey Ryan over nicely, but more back and forth before the same finish would've built them both up very nicely. It seemed like the match was just starting and it was over.

The blatant and name dropping cheap shots at WWE have to go. There's a way to do it, but just directly saying your point in a mean manner isn't it. It just makes you look second fiddle, low rate, crappy, low budget.. No one wants to be TNA.

Teddy and Dragon Kid was a good match. I would've liked to see Teddy get promo time because that's the best part of Teddy Hart, his rambling nonsense. I recently watched the debut show of his new promotion. He compared Konnan to Andre the Giant, Bret Hart, and Bad News Brown, then threatened to kill himself if the fans weren't entertained. And barely paused for a breath before moving on to something else after threatening suicide. It was the weirdest thing I have ever seen and yet, I still gravitate towards Teddy because he's so out there.

Sumner & Lethal was good. Not sure where you're going with this "Bland Man" stuff, but I'll give it a chance. Seems like a bad idea though

Similar to Dave Prazak being DAP, I don't know why Colt Cabana is COC, but I giggle at how it's pronounced. I'm 10 years old

Not sure why song titles are underlined all of a sudden. Don't do that.

Verbalize your own descriptions. Describe exactly what you're wanting. Don't use real world scenarios like the NWO garbage riot to describe things in your univse. Try to micro manage your universe so that things in your federation are important because of your federation. That goes for referancing other federations as a whole.

The main event was pretty good. Certainly the best match on the show.

You've got a really solid base here. You need some fine tuning and getting rid of some quirks. I'd suggest reading over some stuff like ICW (before he went all John Lennon and quit writing shows in favor of a reboot) and WCWA. I'm not just shamelessly putting myself over. You can learn a lot about formatting and structure from reading people's stuff who have been doing this for a while. You're going to make mistakes, but all you can do is learn from them and learn not to make the same mistakes again.