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Post by darksoul on Jan 31, 2011 16:55:11 GMT -5
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Post by darksoul on Jan 31, 2011 23:46:57 GMT -5
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Post by WCWA Online on Feb 4, 2011 19:51:48 GMT -5
My first thought is on the picture in the second reply, because this is the first thing I see before I even click the link. if you're going to directly recycle wrestling storylines, don't recycle things that are fresh on everyone's mind, that EVERYONE seen.. the vague ominous date stinks of the Raw vignette from Monday. Originality is the duplex of booking. What do you prove as a booker by copying what's seen on Raw? that you can bootleg what you see? Most parrots can do that..
I don't like the match writing style at all. Giving the result before the match description is just dumb, because as the reader, I have no reason to want to read the description, since I already know the outcome. There's no drama to this style of writing, at all. It's like reading Smackdown spoilers while you watch Smackdown. It completely pulls you out of the story and destroys any realm of "oh, anything can happen". If you're going to give an end result, do it at the end.. That's why it's called an end result.
The biggest problem I had was that nothing seemed to develop, at all. There's no hook to the show. Nothing to get return viewers. No storylines to make people want to return. Samoa Joe kind of has.. something.. but it's not enough to support the entire federation. With this being the second show in the series, angles and feuds should already be started and going. I think the lack of any interviews at all, or any commentary at all, is what emphasizes the lack of angles. Because even if there are any angles, the viewers, specifically first time viewers, like myself, have absolutely no way of getting into or understanding the angles, since the wrestlers aren't cutting promos on the people they are feuding with, since the announcers aren't there to explain why this guy is doing this. It lacks the psychology of wrestling.
Apart from the Tony Shavonie issue, giving the match results away before the matches air, the matches were well written. The coding helps pretty everything up to an extent and the pictures add a nice visual.
On a side note, you misspelled Fantasy in your board description.
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Post by ricflair4ever on Feb 9, 2011 23:56:52 GMT -5
I didn't mind the match styles so much. If you flesh out your roster in terms of storyline depth,I think it would help a lot. Take things in a different direction than what it looks like its going. I also think the writing of the matches is just fine,but its blown out of the water by giving away the results first. If there is anything I would change immediately. That would be it. I will check out more of your shows to see where its going. You have some good things going for you roster wise.
EDIT:I just read episode 1 and wanted to comment here. I liked the show ,and see more of where the format is supposed to be headed. In terms of it being sort of a "speed thru read". I get it. Nice photos by the way. Good touch. I considered doing that myself,but I don't think nows the time. I still say do away with the results first deal. But in all,I think the fed can go somewhere interesting. Keep puttin em out man
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