WWE 2002 The Maven Era

As someone who really loved first person diaries, and ran a rather successful one, this was rather painful to read. Even a simply fix like this -

Hi, my name is Maven Huffman; I am 26 years old, and a professional wrestler employed by World Wrestling Entertainment. I have been with the company for nearly a year, and was the winner of the first Tough Enough. However, over the past year I have merely been used as a glorified jobber. With the brand extension now in place, I am hoping to finally get the push I deserve, if I play my cards right.

- makes it somewhat better. Overall, you writeup lacked personality and a stronger sense of direction.

Yeah, man, you might want to take a step back and think this over. Try to find Maven's character and use it in your writings. Make it interesting; even for an intro that was too simple. Go and read some other first person diaries, like Matt's for instance, and take some mental notes. Good luck.

This is awful.

Good to see such contructive criticism.

Your second entry was an improvement, I'll give you that. But still, too many errors. With error fixes and some more details, that entry could have been much better. Keep at it.