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Ben - #6 Munchie
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Hybrid RP: "It Just Feels So Good!" May 7, 2011 14:38:34 GMT -5

Post by Ben - #6 Munchie on May 7, 2011 14:38:34 GMT -5

Kevin "'Cause god, it feels so, it just feels so good!"

Oscar "YEAH! New high score!"

As Oscar dismounts from his 'Guitar Hero World Tour' drum kit, he reaches for his bottle of Evian. Kevin puts down his microphone and grabs his Mars bar. Kevin throws the wrapper towards the bin but it hits off the rim.

Oscar "DUDE! Pick that up!"

Kevin "Woah, easy man, was an accident."

Oscar "Sorry to snap at you man, just hate seeing a mess."

Kevin "Well you better not go out to your match against Lightning then, if you do you will see a REAL mess"

Both men chuckle and Kevin goes to pick up the wrapper.

Kevin "So, what is this guy's win-loss record now? I heard it is pretty bad?"

Oscar laughs and shakes his head happily

Oscar "You know I don't like to disrespect people man..."

Kevin stares at Oscar wondering what the heck he was on about. Oscar then turns to Kevin and Oscar bursts out laughing.

Kevin "You almost had me there man."

Oscar "Haha, sorry man, wanted to see if I could pull one over on you. Doesn't look like it worked."

Kevin "Yeah man, I'm not that old.... yet."

Oscar "Haha, anyway I wonder how bad Lightning will be this week, hope he puts up a bit of a fight, don't want an easy win unlike others."

Kevin "Doesn't look too promising my friend, he hasn't been showing too much promise as of late, and I doubt that will change anytime soon."

Oscar "Yeah doesn't look too good, I mean come on, look at all his failed tag teams. Has he even been in a successful tag team? I think not! Also has he won a match in the past few? Next he will turn into the Jake Slash of WFWF."

Kevin "Don't be silly, he is more like the Justin Tyger of the modern day WFWF."

Oscar laughs at the joke.

Oscar "Well who ever he is, he is no match for me and my compulsive driver, no one is."

Kevin rolls his eyes at Oscar.

Kevin "Aren't we modest?"

The two men leave Oscar's game room and head for the kitchen, where Oscar's mother awaits. She greets them with sandwiches. Kevin gets tomato, his favourite, and Oscar gets cheese and bacon, his favourite ever since he had it after his first match. The two hungry men wolf down the sandwiches, gulp their drinks and run for the door.

Mrs Davidson "Eh hem! Oscar. Come back here."

Oscar returns to his mother, knowing what to expect.

Mrs Davidson "You know not to leave without giving your mummy a kiss goodbye."

Oscar, all embarrassed goes and gives his mother a kiss on the cheek then runs for the exit once again.

Kevin "Looking a bit red there Oscar."

Oscar stares at Kevin in a disapproving manner. The two leave for Kevin's Mercedes Benz, which is parked in the driveway. Oscar's mother stands at the door and waves the two boys off. Kevin turns on the radio and Misery Business by Paramore is just finishing. All the hear is:
"'Cause god, it feels so, it just feels so good!"

Last Edit: May 9, 2011 10:07:39 GMT -5 by Ben - #6 Munchie

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Hybrid RP: "It Just Feels So Good!" May 8, 2011 10:56:13 GMT -5

Post by sonstuds on May 8, 2011 10:56:13 GMT -5

It's good that you focused on your match/WFWF for the bulk of this so respect. My criticism would be to maybe work into talking about it a little more smoothly or with more subtlety. In all fairness the transition wasn't done horribly or anything but it was just a case of a setting and few lines of dialogue which didn't really do much to contribute to the overall piece.

That part with his mom was a little strange but hey, some say the cucumber tastes better pickled.

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Hybrid RP: "It Just Feels So Good!" May 8, 2011 11:03:17 GMT -5

Post by Prophet of Ash on May 8, 2011 11:03:17 GMT -5

I didn't like the referencing to the WFWF's past, when it didn't make sense. Tyger was fairly successful as a lower to mid card act but let his own OOC ego get the best of him more often than not. Jake Slash was.. well.. Jake Slash. But the context used here wasn't correct either, because while he was... ....yeah, he was also fairly successful. It was a time when there were a ton of guys, so guys were mostly matched up with equal competitors.

I'm with E for the most part. The monologue focusing mostly on the match was good, albeit some of the analogies were a bit left field. The end thing with the mother was out there. Hopefully it connects to something, because it seemed completely outrageous here.

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Hybrid RP: "It Just Feels So Good!" May 9, 2011 10:07:17 GMT -5

Post by Ben - #6 Munchie on May 9, 2011 10:07:17 GMT -5

May 8, 2011 10:56:13 GMT -5 sonstuds said:

It's good that you focused on your match/WFWF for the bulk of this so respect. My criticism would be to maybe work into talking about it a little more smoothly or with more subtlety. In all fairness the transition wasn't done horribly or anything but it was just a case of a setting and few lines of dialogue which didn't really do much to contribute to the overall piece.

That part with his mom was a little strange but hey, some say the cucumber tastes better pickled.

Thanks, I will try and do it more subtley

May 8, 2011 11:03:17 GMT -5 Prophet of Ash said:

I didn't like the referencing to the WFWF's past, when it didn't make sense. Tyger was fairly successful as a lower to mid card act but let his own OOC ego get the best of him more often than not. Jake Slash was.. well.. Jake Slash. But the context used here wasn't correct either, because while he was... ....yeah, he was also fairly successful. It was a time when there were a ton of guys, so guys were mostly matched up with equal competitors.

I'm with E for the most part. The monologue focusing mostly on the match was good, albeit some of the analogies were a bit left field. The end thing with the mother was out there. Hopefully it connects to something, because it seemed completely outrageous here.

Oh, I got told the references worked :-[

Also the mother bit, I was watching TV whilst writing this and the same thing happened on there and just thought to include it

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Hybrid RP: "It Just Feels So Good!" May 9, 2011 10:28:53 GMT -5

Post by bad guy™ on May 9, 2011 10:28:53 GMT -5

I'll take full blame for the references. I've been working with Davidson on improving by proofreading and such (Rev did it for me back in the day, I figured even though I'm far from the best RPr in the WFWF, this guy has potential so I could at least smooth out some of the rough edges), and when he wrote his original copy it had references to real wrestlers (Ryder and Haas, and anytime a new guy mentions real wrestlers they tend to get flack) and the only two I could think of at that exact moment that would remotely relate to those two in a general context were Slash and Tyger, and only Tyger for the reason of every time he and I talked, he always mentioned how horrible his original WFWF run was. I wasn't around to see it obviously, but hey, the shoe fit in theory.

I told you my opinion over chat, Ben. This was, all in all, pretty alright. It's not the best thing I've ever seen, but it's not the worst. You clearly have raw potential and a drive to get better...I just hope you continue moving upward.

Last Edit: May 9, 2011 10:30:32 GMT -5 by bad guy™

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