First try at this....

A little generic BUT for a new guy, that is usually the way it goes.(my first rp was so cliche.)

Anyways, overall I thought your description shows potential and yea your speech is generic for a wrestler along with the setting, but again, your new and this was quite good for that. I don't want to say your great and give you a big head but I definitely want to say you show a lot of potential as a rper.

Give others a read, people like Alex Sean, EBR, and even Ace, could give you a better idea of what your options are for your wrestler.

I wish to the best of luck in WFWF and have fun with it!

Revvie ;D

ahem.


I'd suggest not using so much coding. there's no reason for the whole roleplay to be in italics. I'd also work on your spell checking and grammar checking. there's several instances of misused apostrophe s.

As for the actual content of the roleplay, I'd definitely work more on character development than generic wrestling roleplay. Especially when it's just an in ring promo. The roleplays that you're writing aren't happening at a show. They are basically the build up to your matches, why you should win. The hype up to your match. What you were doing between matches.

Consider this more of story telling than wrestling promos. You're writing the story of your character.