Justin Sanity
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Post by Justin Sanity on Jul 23, 2013 15:09:58 GMT -5
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slowgraffiti
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Joined on: Sept 15, 2011 10:26:36 GMT -5
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Post by slowgraffiti on Jul 26, 2013 10:36:21 GMT -5
This is the first time I'll have read any of your work, so forgive me if I don't have a great grasp on some things... - I like how the first match isn't strictly a "team" match, but they all come representing groups. A bit of a spot fest to start things off, but it has its spot on the card (no pun intended) - introduces a lot of guys, and it's a big win for Carter Gray to get him over. - A curious matchup, Nosawa and Corino, interested to see how it goes. Not really sure how to take Nosawa winning, the comeback seemed a bit abrupt for all the punishment Corino doled out, think it would have made more sense to have Corino win and Nosawa get revenge to build the feud. It's your fed though, so run with it, you might have a grander plan than I can see here - I do enjoy the mix of not just US guys, but Japanese and Mexcian based guys, even if I have a natural antipathy towards Crazy Boy. I'm picking up a bit of a 2005/6 era CZW vibe from your fed, which is cool. Another spotty match, but this one stood out thanks to being more hardcore based. Like I said, spotfests have their spot, but try and not overload it or else they all run into each other. - Seems a bit odd to have DDP as an announcer, just a touch unrealistic for the style of fed you have IMO. - I was looking forward to the Kash/Octagon match, so I'm interested to see where you take it from here with that ending, could be interesting. One little thing though, it's Bryce Remsburg, not Rumsberg, assuming you mean the Chikara ref. - Short match between the Inner City Guns and Londrick v2, it filled a space on the card but I'd have preferred to see it go a bit longer, especially given the potential of all four of those guys in the same match. - KENTA vs Hashimoto again was good for what it was, but as high on the card as it was, would have preferred a little more substance. I don't know if it's just your writing style, but everything seems to be very bang-bang-bang-done, maybe experiment with a slower build especially for matches like this. - Disappointed to see no Callihan/Mesias match, I assume you're saving it for the next show so I guess I'll have to wait until then. - The main event was a lot better, length and content wise, definitely the best match for me. Really enjoyed it, and it'll be interesting to see what route you go with Steen as the champ. Apologies if my review sounded a little overly critical there - I think it's great to see another indy style fed appear, and I really like the international mix of guys you use. My main problem was with the match structure, everything except the main event felt a little too short for me, there didn't feel like any real change in time between the first and the semi-main event. Only other comment I have is keep an eye out for spelling and grammar, but that gets the best of us, so it isn't a huge complaint, just a little proof reading required.
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Post by ICW on Jul 31, 2013 18:12:19 GMT -5
You’re not wasting any time with frivolous re-introductions of the 2WF. I dig it although you could’ve added a brief explanation as to why the 2WF has returned, what to expect, etc…
Scramble Match for the Light Heavyweight Championship: Dragon Kid, CIMA, Carter Gray, Jack Evans, AR Fox, Psycosis and Mascara Dorada Solid choice to kick off the show. You definitely delivered with tons of high flying action (as expected). It was interesting how the wrestlers were split into three distinct groups yet it wasn’t a team vs. team vs. team match. Carter Gray picking up the victory is pretty damn huge for him.
No segment in between matches is something I’m generally not a fan of…
Steve Corino vs. Nosawa You could have demonstrated better psychology throughout this match. Corino dished out serious punishment to Nosawa and his comeback was sort of abrupt. I don’t have a problem with Nosawa coming back but it should’ve been done much slowly, with some proper build. Corino delivered a brain buster onto a HARDWOOD floor. It’s going to take a while for a human being to recover from that one.
No segment yet again. It really is a good idea to add segments in order to break up matches. Could be a promo or a vignette of some kind…
Four Way Dance for the Hardcore Championship: Bestia 666 vs. Crazy Boy vs. Supreme vs. Balls Mahoney As Mikey said this was a really spotty match up. It was pretty brutal, don’t get me wrong, but I’ve learned throughout the years that writing hardcore wrestling takes a certain skill. It’s not that easy to write as a lot of people would think.
I dig DDP as an interviewer but it seems a little bit of a stretch that he would be an interviewer for an indy type fed.
Pretty generic promo from Kid Kash
Kid Kash vs. Octagon Referee stops the match after Octagon dove head first into the guard rail. Little bit of a shame that the match didn’t last longer before the spot occurred. Kash delivering the Tiger Driver 98 afterwards was very dastardly! I am looking forward to this feud.
Decent Sami Callihan promo.
Rich Swann & Ricochet vs. Paul London and Flip Kendrick Short match that probably could’ve benefited from it being just a touch longer. It seemed a little rushed. You could’ve done a lot more with this match considering the talent involved.
Strong Style Presentation: KENTA vs. Daichi Hashimoto It was a pretty decent match but, again, your biggest issue is your psychology (or lack thereof). You really need to slowly build up to the big finish if you want your matches to be better.
Pretty bummed Callihan/Mesias isn’t happening. Adds to their feud though…
Main Event - 2FW World Title Match: Kevin Steen vs. Samoa Joe MUCH better match. I definitely like Kevin Steen but I was hoping Samoa Joe would pick up the victory. I look forward to seeing where you take Steen…
My friend…you have a TON of potential. Please don’t get discouraged by any criticism I’ve given you throughout this review. I think you need to better capture the psychology of wrestling. You start off with a decent beginning and you have a big time ending…but there really is no middle.
I’d also work on adding segments/promos/vignettes in between your matches. There was also minor spelling mistakes throughout the show.
Overall, good job.
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