|
Post by hardyz on Nov 24, 2006 10:07:59 GMT -5
Setting:A very dim lit room with water dripping from very old and loose pipes. They are creaking very loud.
Horror:Hello. I am the High Horror. And this is my sanctuary...a boiler room. Now this is my first match here, and I want to do it right. My match is against "The Curse Eagle". Now our styles of wrestling clash quite a bit. We are both technical high fliers. I will just prove to be the better of the two.The only difference is I am a tall muscular man, and well not much to say about my short and stout opponent. This match is gonna turn into a war, plain and simple. A British/American war. And we all know how those two wars turned out.Now no disrespect to Britain, but U.S.A is better 10 fold.
Takes a sip of water.
Horror:Now, some people may say I am an ass, but I'm not. I am just having a little fun with being a new superstar with my big break. So don't think anything less of me than you did before I made those cracks. So to finally say, Eagle, good luck because you are most certainly gonna need it to defeat me...The High Horror.
The dim light goes out and you hear footsteps going out of the room. Now there is complete silence.
|
|
|
Post by cureforthesickness on Nov 24, 2006 11:56:21 GMT -5
ok, so here's some advice.
Expand your speech. Make what you're saying more in depth. Take your ideas and make them more elaberate. Instead of just saying "I'm going to beat you" say "You are a far less inferior being to me. My power and speed out powers you greatly, therefore, you shall fall to me".
With a gimmick like the High Horror, being dark and demented and all, your speech should be an easy part to come by. Read Obo roleplays, you'll get a good idea of what to do with your speech. Very much the same gimmick
|
|
|
Post by hardyz on Nov 24, 2006 13:19:23 GMT -5
Thanks Obo. That is good advice.
|
|
Revvie®
Main Eventer
Somewhere between Reality, and the Absurd
Joined on: Jun 29, 2005 1:04:26 GMT -5
Posts: 4,327
|
Post by Revvie® on Nov 25, 2006 3:57:57 GMT -5
ok, so here's some advice. Expand your speech. Make what you're saying more in depth. Take your ideas and make them more elaberate. Instead of just saying "I'm going to beat you" say "You are a far less inferior being to me. My power and speed out powers you greatly, therefore, you shall fall to me". With a gimmick like the High Horror, being dark and demented and all, your speech should be an easy part to come by. Read Obo roleplays, you'll get a good idea of what to do with your speech. Very much the same gimmick shhh dont read obo rps lol obo=lame...lol jk seriously take obos advice and you will be on your way. Revvie
|
|
Calvin
Main Eventer
visit my myspace and listen to my music
Joined on: Dec 18, 2001 15:13:21 GMT -5
Posts: 3,791
|
Post by Calvin on Nov 28, 2006 3:21:34 GMT -5
ok, here we go. Never....ever, EVER, say "setting" in the rp. You don't need to label the rp, because we all know what the setting it, and what the speech is. Speaking of the setting, there really isn't one. You say you are in a boiler room. Well, what is in a boiler room? Obviously it's extremely hot, there are well, boilers, and there are also a lot of pipes, and other sutff like that. Create the scene, you gotta like, expand, give us a picture of a boiler room with your words.
The speech is well, poorish. I mean, well you are new to rping, so you don't know much about how to speak. Being a dark and apparentlyu demented character, which btw I gotta say now I didn't get either of those hints in the rp, just from your name honestly. If you are going to be that, you gotta also yet again, in your speech, use words to give us the mood of your character. You need to expand on your words a lot. Why is your opponent gonna lose to you? don't just say he will, anyone can say that. But why? how? when? where? basically answer the 5 w's. Who, what, where, when, why....and of course, add in how. Answer all that in your speech, and you wil be on your way.
|
|