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Post by mattoriginal on Jan 4, 2007 21:09:31 GMT -5
'In The Flesh' Hits the P.A. as fans groan in disapproval of another completely over the top gimmick.Floyd Geldof comes to the ring wearing his gear under a trench coat.
Floyd Geldof:You dumb fans need to shut up. I'm not out here to start a riot. No I am the riot! Now, I got on-line the other day and I saw that I am booked In a battle royal! My Debut!Now there are some superstars in this match that I have respect for. There is The Mexican Samurai, Psycho, Cryptic, 'The One',and The Diamond(Fans Still Boo at the extremely over the top gimmick). But there is one man in the match I have no respect for: J...T... Brown. He recently signed a contract with this promotion, and the fact you let the fans cheer you. You show them.......(Geldof Shakes head)...Respect. Every-time I come to this ring I am showed NO respect from these fans. So if you, or these fans will not show me respect. Then I'll beat it out of the participants!
'Pink' leaves the ring as the fans throw trash at him.
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Post by cureforthesickness on Jan 4, 2007 21:35:24 GMT -5
ehh.. not too good, but I've definately seen worse for a first. A few "tips of the trade"
Don't use in ring promos or interviews. So many better settings to use than a ring. Avoid any "TV style" interviews, unless it has specific reasoning.
Length is your friend. Write as much as you can and express your thoughts completely. Don't rush what you write.
Type out your roleplays in a program like Microsoft Word. Then, if you get tired of writing a roleplay mid way through, you can stop and go back later. Also, you get spell check with it, so that's always a plus.
Don't mention gimmicks. Live it as it were your life.
Read other roleplays around. Guys like Wayne McGurk, myself, Macabre, & Reverend Shadow are all good people to read. Read roleplays and you'll pick stuff up.
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Post by mattoriginal on Jan 4, 2007 21:38:42 GMT -5
ehh.. not too good, but I've definately seen worse for a first. A few "tips of the trade" Don't use in ring promos or interviews. So many better settings to use than a ring. Avoid any "TV style" interviews, unless it has specific reasoning. Length is your friend. Write as much as you can and express your thoughts completely. Don't rush what you write. Type out your roleplays in a program like Microsoft Word. Then, if you get tired of writing a roleplay mid way through, you can stop and go back later. Also, you get spell check with it, so that's always a plus. Don't mention gimmicks. Live it as it were your life. Read other roleplays around. Guys like Wayne McGurk, myself, Macabre, & Reverend Shadow are all good people to read. Read roleplays and you'll pick stuff up. Thanks for the advice. |
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Post by Calvin on Jan 10, 2007 18:20:48 GMT -5
ok I am taking time to read house show rps tonight. This is the first one I read. first of all, in a rp there is no such thing as a gimmick. The rp is the gimmick. Mentioning "gimmick" takes away reality. You want to live out a reality in the rp. So dont' mention it.
Secondly, you didn't really give a setting. A setting is usually what you want to give us before anything. A settinng or an atmopshere. And try to describeit as if you were there. Give us the picture, the whole picture. All the senses you need in order to feel the setting as if you were there yourself.
Thirdly, your rp is bunched up in one paragraph, Spread it out. Take your time. Don't rush and yes, use word. Or something with grammar check. Length isn't the key to a rp, it's quality. Quality over quantity. However, if you bunch it up like this, the quality looks pretty bad, no offense.
Your speech is ok, but you can't just say grrr I'm gonna beat you all because I'm cool. You gotta get into depth of whats' wrong with your characters. It's easier if you introduce your character/theme first, and then go at your opponents. Your trench coat makes me think you're character is dark, which is ok...but it's overused, so try to make it stand out. Good luck.
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