WWX: High Voltage! premier episode

Okay right away I notcied a very common mistake. Your repadedly saying, he did this then he did that. It makes it boring.

Tag Match: Decent match, but hard to read & all over the place.

6 man tag match: Once again, all over the place & hard to read. It seemed like it was rushed & you didn't add much detail.


OVERALL: 5.5/10

spread out your thoughts more. For example, Lillian sort of rushed through all the intros. Have the entrance music for the first guy hit, he comes strutting out onto the stage, he's announce by Lillian, then makes his way to the ring. as his entrance ends, the opponent's entrance starts. Opponent comes out, then is introduced, then heads to the ring. Just process everything you do to it's fullest extent, so your thoughts are more complete.

As Luke said, try to mix up the way you describe things. Work on showcasing your full vocabulary, because it'll make for a more interesting read for the readers, and will be more fun to write as well. Instead of basicly just listing the highspots, try to really narrate what's happening, paint a picture for the readers, make them believe in what you are writing.

Well, like several said above you need to improve on some aspects of the writing and show lay out. But overall the card was good. I also enjoyed the creative aspect of it, I never really thought of "The" Masterpiece and "The" Brian Kendrick as a tag team but I think you pulled it off quite well. Although as this storyline progresses I would like to see them become enemy's. It would be a great storyline having Master's become the face and Kendrick remain the heel. My idea for the storyline would be that Master's is nothing more than Kendrick's body guard and carrying the weight of the tag team. But that's just an idea over all I liked the event, I'm not to sure about the black out at the end of the show but never the less it was very creative and it served it's purpose of getting Jericho over more as a top heel.