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Encore RP: my only friend Jan 23, 2016 0:13:20 GMT -5 via mobile

Post by c-scope on Jan 23, 2016 0:13:20 GMT -5

Well, here I am, 20 years old, 5 years after I started my wrestling career. I've been in positions to be "the guy" in many companies, and got screwed every time. And I'm sick of it. Now "Encore" as the idiots that think they're in charge are calling it, my first match in WFWF. Ive wanted to be here since I was 16 years old, not because I wanted to be a wrestler like most, no for a different reason, a more important reason. The day Dave Baxter found me in the woods he signed me to wrestle, i made a friend, the only man i have ever and will ever call a friend in my life. His name was Lenny belle, he was a great man.my first match was a tag match Lenny and i vs. tim and josh Baxter (Dave's nephews) we won the match. Lenny and Baxter were the only people that told me i did good. I thought Dave saw something in me, I continued for another year, after every match Lenny was right there to tell me how i did. I thought Baxter saw something in me, turns out i was wrong, no one saw anything in me, but Lenny. To everyone else i was the freak Dave found in the woods, I cant belive i was so stupid. Is been there alittle over 10 months, I had just turned 16 Dave told me, "kid your winning the title tonight!" I couldn't belive it, it was amazing, until I got to the ring ref looked at me, "Dave changed his mind your losing." So I did what I was getting paid to do but Dave and I had alittle talk afterwards. That brings me to now my opponents bison,sventasson,sartiosos.Your nothing compared to me, i dont care if its your first matches in WFWF to, im better and you won't beat me. This won't be a wrestling match this will be an all out brawl.My goal since that day i was promised the belt was the same, get to WFWF, win the title, spit in the bosses face and expose how crooked bookers really are. Get ready boys, at encore I'm coming for a war. And get ready champ I'm coming for your belt.

my only friend (4years ago)

Trevor wolf: what the hell was that Dave?!?!?
Dave Baxter: kid, I'm sorry it just wasn't gonna work with you.
Wolf: whats that supposed to mean?
Dave: well...
Wolf: thats all i ever was to you huh Dave? A side show, the kid you found in the woods!
Dave: look i understand...
Wolf: no you don't understand! Your the boss, no ones gonna screw you! You make the calls! My whole life ive had nothing !
Dave: look..
Wolf: nothing Dave! Nothing! That was my shot to be somebody and you screwed me!(starts to walk off)
Dave: no, it wasn't your chance, you aren't anything now, and you never will be. Your a joke. Your done kid, your fired.
Wolf: no, your wrong. I will be something, the biggest wrestling company in the world is WFWF and I will become champ there, and I will expose how crooked bookers like you are!
(In locker room, wolfs throwing stuff into bag)
Wolf: this is total bs Lenny!
Lenny: i know Trev, just calm down.
Wolf: i cant calm down, all this time i thought he saw something in me, I was wrong only you did, no one else!
Lenny: i always saw it in you, but just relax if you calm down we can get you your job back
Wolf: no i dont want it back. Dave can go to hell. Hes barley got anybody, whats he got , you thats it.
Lenny: Trev..
Wolf: no Lenny, I'm done here, your my best and only friend, I'll keep in touch and I'll see you again soon.
Lenny:Trev!
Wolf: Lenny you should leave to. Hes gonna do thus again, come with me, expose the truth show how crooked theese guys are.
Lenny: nah, I'm 52 years old man, it's to late for me, I'm staying here, but I'm gonna make Dave lose as much money as possible before i retire.
Wolf: I'm gonna miss seeing you every day Lenny.
Lenny: (hugs Trevor) see you kid, keep in touch.
Wolf: I will man, I will.(starts to leave)
Lenny: good luck! Show the world and Dave what you can really do, take the WFWF title and run with it man. Run with it!

Last Edit: Jan 23, 2016 21:38:16 GMT -5 by c-scope

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Encore RP: my only friend Jan 26, 2016 19:56:14 GMT -5 via the ProBoards App

Post by bad guy™ on Jan 26, 2016 19:56:14 GMT -5

c-scope

Alright. I'll give you props for really giving this a shot. For someone who knew absolutely nothing about WFWF, e-feds, any of that, I think you did an admirable job in even managing to get something coherent out. That's a big plus.

So here's the deal about your RP. First thing's first, you listened. You gave your guy a little bit of a backstory to build off of. You can always tweak as necessary but you've at least given yourself a foundation.

Now that I've seen what you can actually do, evaluation time~! The story itself is something every new RPr does. Young, discovered by someone else, tiring of the habits of the old place with politics or drama and wanting to come to where the big boys play. Solid try on that.

Moving forward, you're going to want to take the story you've started and build it up even more. Show us ya boy on the outside of the ring. What the business is/has done with him outside.

Next match, you'll likely face someone who's not one of the super new guys like you, so you'll have to learn how to talk more about your opponent than just saying "the other new guys" like you did here. You'll actually have to read the show that'll be posted when the deadline passes, read their most recent RP, find out who they are and talk them down a bit.

As for your dialogue with Lenny, dialogue's tricky. One, you really want some kind of scene. Even something generic. Two, you want it to be realistic. Imagine any dialogue you have as if you're having a real conversation with a real person. Are your conversations always that quick, decisive and to the point? About anything with almost anyone? Doubtful. It's the hardest thing to learn at first, making it sound natural. You'll eventually get it with more practice, and when the others come in to give you advice, just keep listening to all the advice you get.

You're very raw but I see potential in you. Keep at it, and you'll be a solid card main stay here.

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Encore RP: my only friend Jan 29, 2016 21:43:16 GMT -5 via mobile

Post by jdfranchise on Jan 29, 2016 21:43:16 GMT -5

Shawn nailed a lot of my talking points bro, chief among them is that you've proven that you're willing to listen. That's a big part of this game and how you improve your craft. You should be commended for that, especially coming in as green as you are and still giving a good effort.

Content wise, everyone starts somewhere when they begin. Now that you've given us a background on Wolf, this is where you expand on it by utilizing the things you presented. Continue to think about the people in his life and build Trevor by their interactions. Dialouge is difficult at first, but I swear by this, it will help the quality of your work.

I think something that you need to really work on is your presentation, specifically not capitalizing things that needed to be capitalized. The depth and complexity of your sentences will come with experience, but trying to structure your sentences correctly will improve your presentation exponentially.

Overall, it's a pretty solid first outing that you can build on. Continue to listen to the guys that have experience and you will find yourself improving quickly.

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Encore RP: my only friend Jan 30, 2016 10:39:15 GMT -5 via mobile

Post by c-scope on Jan 30, 2016 10:39:15 GMT -5

Jan 29, 2016 21:43:16 GMT -5 jdfranchise said:

Shawn nailed a lot of my talking points bro, chief among them is that you've proven that you're willing to listen. That's a big part of this game and how you improve your craft. You should be commended for that, especially coming in as green as you are and still giving a good effort.

Content wise, everyone starts somewhere when they begin. Now that you've given us a background on Wolf, this is where you expand on it by utilizing the things you presented. Continue to think about the people in his life and build Trevor by their interactions. Dialouge is difficult at first, but I swear by this, it will help the quality of your work.

I think something that you need to really work on is your presentation, specifically not capitalizing things that needed to be capitalized. The depth and complexity of your sentences will come with experience, but trying to structure your sentences correctly will improve your presentation exponentially.

Overall, it's a pretty solid first outing that you can build on. Continue to listen to the guys that have experience and you will find yourself improving quickly.

ok thanks. Sorry about the sentence structure ive never been very good at that.

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Encore RP: my only friend Feb 3, 2016 16:17:47 GMT -5

Post by Drakz on Feb 3, 2016 16:17:47 GMT -5

I won't go over anything the other two have covered beside one thing. This RP is laid out as two totally separate scenes, that's fine, but at the same time you've also broken the description and dialogue into two very separate entities as well. I'd like to see you integrate the two to paint a fuller picture. Also take a look at some of the other writer's stuff here to look at how we format our RPs. Everyone does it differently but at it's root the purpose of formatting is to make the RP easier to read, differentiating between character's, speech/dialogue and inner thoughts of the character if you write them in the 1st person.

I'm looking forward to seeing where you take us with your story mate.

One other thing is that in the WFWF "universe" there is no script. We write as though the matches (whilst insane and unrealistic when compared to a legitimate fight/contest) are actual sporting feats/all out wars. Basically it's all real and as such a booker wouldn't make the decision to give or not give you a title.

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Encore RP: my only friend Feb 3, 2016 17:31:53 GMT -5 via mobile Drakz likes this

Post by c-scope on Feb 3, 2016 17:31:53 GMT -5

Feb 3, 2016 16:17:47 GMT -5 Drakz said:

I won't go over anything the other two have covered beside one thing. This RP is laid out as two totally separate scenes, that's fine, but at the same time you've also broken the description and dialogue into two very separate entities as well. I'd like to see you integrate the two to paint a fuller picture. Also take a look at some of the other writer's stuff here to look at how we format our RPs. Everyone does it differently but at it's root the purpose of formatting is to make the RP easier to read, differentiating between character's, speech/dialogue and inner thoughts of the character if you write them in the 1st person.

I'm looking forward to seeing where you take us with your story mate.

One other thing is that in the WFWF "universe" there is no script. We write as though the matches (whilst insane and unrealistic when compared to a legitimate fight/contest) are actual sporting feats/all out wars. Basically it's all real and as such a booker wouldn't make the decision to give or not give you a title.

ok, yeah i got that to the charecter it isn't scripted but what I was kinda getting at was that Dave wanted wolf to have the title and that he was fixing the matc in his favor then changed his mind and told the ref not to let him win, i probably should've explained that alittle bit better.