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Post by Deleted on Jul 16, 2012 10:58:21 GMT -5
(Psst! This will be run on Wrestling Spirit two, no mods, just wrestle. I am getting the game today, but will start soon)  The reason I chose Ace is because he is a raw rookie all rounder. It will take a while for him to break through, but it is not like he has a job! Ha! He is unemployed. Here is everything you need to know. Rumble skills Brawling C- Power C Strong Style C- Hardcore C- MMA F Technical Skills Mat wrestling C+ Chain wrestling C- Submissions C- Aerial C- Flashiness C- ------- Entertainment Skills Microphone C Charisma C Acting C Looks C Star Quality C ------ Performance skills Basics C- psychology E Safety C- Consistency D Selling C- --------= The physical skills Athleticism C+ Toughness C- Stamina C+ --------= Backstage skills Business F Booking F Respect f ----------= Other skills Intensity C Stiffness C- Resilience B- (yay) Menace E Refereeing F Spirit D Popularity-> D's everywhere in the USA except Puerto Rico, like every where else not USA, is an F. Biography Ace Youngblood is a talented all rounder, especially for such a young man. Part Native American, he wears a distinctive red streak down the center of his hair, and sometimes comes to the ring dressed in a traditional war cloak. Whew! That was alot. |
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Post by Deleted on Jul 16, 2012 11:36:54 GMT -5
Ok, you're off to a decent start. Although there a few things that could look better.
First off, use some logos. Not only does it help the presentation of the diary it also helps people view what's going on with the stats. If needed I could PM you some of the TEW skill logos.
Also add some bold to your text. it also makes the presentation better.
Remember too add lots of detail when you are doing a POV diary.
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Post by Deleted on Jul 16, 2012 14:34:05 GMT -5
Thank you for the tips.
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Post by Deleted on Jul 17, 2012 21:54:30 GMT -5
I do not know what to do! I am screwed. I live inside my car. But, I have a working pen and a notepad. I might as well start at the bottom. My name is Ace Youngblood. I had to drive all the way to the Tri-State Area to get a job. But, going away from the reservation is nice. I got to meet legend Rip Chord (remember, this is Wrestling Spirit 2, so these are fictitious) at least. He owns a wrestling company now! It is called Mid Atlantic Wrestling. I was offered a 8 month verbal agreement. I would be a face. I accepted on the spot, and found out that money would be different. You get a percentage of a purse. You know, like horse racing purses. The winner gets 80 percent. But, the loser gets 20 percent. I would like to be the next big thing, and everyone that has seen me wrestle, say I will be the NEXT BIG THING, but I get uncomfortable afterwards. I win a couple matches, I can live somewhere not my car. Plus, worse comes to worse, I can go back to Seneca, New York. Now, more on Mid Atlantic Wrestling! They are a very local wrestling place. I am generous on this! Chances are, I will main event here! I wrestle TODAY! Will write later! Aces Out!
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Post by Deleted on Jul 18, 2012 2:44:30 GMT -5
Woo! I WON! The guy I versed, I had to hit him with my finisher twice. It was tough, because he kicked out the first time, but once i got him the second time, he was done. I am thinking about joining a second promotion, maybe contact Danger and Violence Extreme, or maybe a less bloody type of place, but I think I would be good at Hardcoring this place up.Maybe go to somewhere up in canada, or even Japan! But, all I care about is just getting a title shot. At least I gained 1000 dollars for my win! Aces OUT!
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Post by Red Dragon on Jul 18, 2012 7:31:02 GMT -5
Ok this needs a bit of work. Your writing needs improvement but that will come in time. It's good that you've taken on board the comments but bolding certain words just doesn't work. Try explaining more and putting more detail into it. Not just about the match itself but about real life. Add more emotion into the story and more of the character into it. Try centering the writing too might make it look better. Your grammar isn't too bad but your missing out a few caps. No need to break character to tell us that this is Wrestling Spirit 2 it interupts the writing. Say abit about Rip too, make him into a character not just a name. I fixed your image too, on photobucket just copy and paste the ![]() code in the box on the right hand side. If you need anymore help just PM. I've given two links below, thier both great first person diaries. Give them a read and try and take inspiration from them. Good luck and keep this up. wfigs.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=wrestlingsims&action=display&thread=201078&page=1wfigs.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=wrestlingsims&action=display&thread=93174 |
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