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Post by Deleted on Nov 30, 2013 13:03:15 GMT -5
WFWF I'm here. I'm here to prepare you all for war. Yeah that's right I said it I'm declaring war on WFWF. I see my first victim insight. ACE BENNETT you don't know me but somebody wants you on the shelf and I'm the man that's gonna put you there. I'm gonna use you to make a name for myself. In time you will know my reason for being here but all I can tell you is this. When I got out of prison Dutchess was there waiting as he picked me up he said "Mason, an old friend called me a month back. He wants us to make an impact for this fed. I can't tell you more for now but in time it will come to light." As I thought about what he said I felt purpose and direction for the first time in my life. About a week ago all the hard work and training I had been doing was finally going to fruition. Dutchess pulled me aside and said "Mason, the man called last night, he said the WFWF is holding the scars and stripes ppv and it's your time to shine. There is a wrestler there named ACE BENNETT and we have been paid handsomely for you to hurt this man, rob him of the title shot, and put the WFWF on notice. "
I'm here telling you tonight the end if times is upon you WFWF, the AGE OF FEAR is here and it's time to get the party started. Hahaha!!!! (fade to black)
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Revvie®
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Somewhere between Reality, and the Absurd
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Post by Revvie® on Nov 30, 2013 13:31:05 GMT -5
I just want to say first, Welcome to the WFWF. Also; my first, and only suggestion for now, is go read older rps in the fed. Either from the last show, or start to check out some of the Scars and Stripes that are up also. Get a feel for the place, and how we roleplay here..and learn through reading others for now.
That's it for this rp.
-Revvie
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Post by Deleted on Nov 30, 2013 18:40:49 GMT -5
Thanks for the welcome rev. I did read over some and I know I probably didn't separate it right but I just didn't want to offend anyone or anything. Just was trying to do something different I guess.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 1, 2013 12:21:41 GMT -5
I completely agree with Revvie on this one. Go and read some of the old stuff on here. My recommendations of RPs to read: Kyzer, Obo and Revvie. They are all great examples of how to create a character and give them personality. Makes us feel what your characters are feeling. As long as you read and take your time, you will get better.
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Post by bad guy™ on Dec 1, 2013 13:41:19 GMT -5
You know what, I actually liked this. I am curious as to why you picked out Ace out of everyone in this entire place, but you know, not bad.
The grammar here was atrocious. I cannot even sugar coat that. When you write RPs, write them in Word, where you have spell check. If you do not have word, then at least write them on here and use WFs spell check feature. It will go a long way in making this look a ton better right out of the gate.
You clearly understand the promo aspect, and I imagine that comes from your being a fan of wrestling. Good start. What I would like to know (like when you asked me exactly what we looked for in RPs) was more background on Dixon. Introduce us to him, his life, all of that. Hell, just have him taking a walk outside the arena and just talking his history would have been good. Just, needed something.
I completely agree with everyone else that you should check out the S&S RPs as they go up. These are arguably the best pieces our guys can write, because we are all fighting for a title match, something only maybe 5-6 people will get in the following year cycle. It is a big deal so everyone wants it.
You do that, you will understand what I mean about telling a story. You are brand new to RPing as a whole, so I was not expecting much. You showed, which is more than most new guys do so that is awesome. You follow our advice and if you actually stick around though, you could become really good and have some fun here.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 1, 2013 15:35:41 GMT -5
You know what, I actually liked this. I am curious as to why you picked out Ace out of everyone in this entire place, but you know, not bad. The grammar here was atrocious. I cannot even sugar coat that. When you write RPs, write them in Word, where you have spell check. If you do not have word, then at least write them on here and use WFs spell check feature. It will go a long way in making this look a ton better right out of the gate. You clearly understand the promo aspect, and I imagine that comes from your being a fan of wrestling. Good start. What I would like to know (like when you asked me exactly what we looked for in RPs) was more background on Dixon. Introduce us to him, his life, all of that. Hell, just have him taking a walk outside the arena and just talking his history would have been good. Just, needed something. I completely agree with everyone else that you should check out the S&S RPs as they go up. These are arguably the best pieces our guys can write, because we are all fighting for a title match, something only maybe 5-6 people will get in the following year cycle. It is a big deal so everyone wants it. You do that, you will understand what I mean about telling a story. You are brand new to RPing as a whole, so I was not expecting much. You showed, which is more than most new guys do so that is awesome. You follow our advice and if you actually stick around though, you could become really good and have some fun here. I used to be a professional wrestler until I tore my knee to pieces. So i do understand the promo aspect but as a wrestler I was taught that a new character shouldn't give himself away right away. Your only supposed to give ppl enough to wet their teeth and evolve it from there. Keep ppl interested and on their toes. So i guess I need to work on my stories themselves. Sorry the grammar is bad but I'm doing this from a mobile phone and auto correct makes it more difficult because I have to go back in fix it, so there are some things I do miss.
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Post by Ace Bennett on Dec 1, 2013 22:12:14 GMT -5
Very nice to see a new person around as always. However, I must ask why Ace? Just curious I suppose, haha. Also, to add on to your comment about typing this from your phone; if you have any way to type something out on the computer rather than your phone, you should definitely do that. If not, I'd consider learning some of the basic coding of the board (bolding, italics, colors, etc.) to make your RPs look a little nicer. The way you have it now, it kind just looks like a block of regular text. Also, another tip to build off of everyone else. I'd definitely consider writing these in more than one sitting. Length isn't the most important thing, but you're definitely going to want to write more than a few sentences. That and pretty much what everyone else has said with an emphasis on reading some other guy's stuff. That will help you get a better idea of the style that is typical around here. Good luck and hope to see you stick around!
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Post by Markw on Dec 10, 2013 11:10:26 GMT -5
go read older rps in the fed. My recommendations of RPs to read: Kyzer, Obo and Revvie. They are all great examples of how to create a character and give them personality. Makes us feel what your characters are feeling. As long as you read and take your time, you will get better. When you write RPs, write them in Word, where you have spell check. If you do not have word, get Open Office., then at least write them on here and use WFs spell check feature. It will go a long way in making this look a ton better right out of the gate. What I would like to know (like when you asked me exactly what we looked for in RPs) was more background on Dixon. Introduce us to him, his life, all of that. Hell, just have him taking a walk outside the arena and just talking his history would have been good. Just, needed something. Also, another tip to build off of everyone else. I'd definitely consider writing these in more than one sitting. Length isn't the most important thing, but you're definitely going to want to write more than a few sentences. I'm doing this from a mobile phone and auto correct makes it more difficult because I have to go back in fix it, so there are some things I do miss. Don't write your RPs on your phone ever, if you can avoid it. Writing in several sittings using some word processor will really help you. But yeah reading work from other people really is a must if you want to make significant improvements quickly, so I'd really advise you to do that. --- Anyway welcome to the WFWF, it's nice to see another new face and there are definitely bits in here that suggest that the character is one that could be completely different to anything we've got here at the moment, if you're going to take on the advice that Shawn/Ace/Proggy/Rev have given you and will give you in the future. On top of what they've said, I'll just add this. Try to plan out exactly what you're going to reveal to us about the character with each new RP, plan out where you want to take the character in the shows and in your RPs and then plan what you need to do in each RP to get those things across. It took me far too long to figure out that planning everything really, really, helps. So I figured I may well add that to the wealth of advice you've already been given. And if you've got any queries contact Shawn, Trace or basically anyone else (myself included) who has given you advice in here, I'm sure any of us would be willing to help you out.
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