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I wrote a new song, looking for feedback from friendzzz Nov 13, 2016 23:50:00 GMT -5 BCizzle, Chicago, and 3 more like this

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Post by 3Lephant (Naptown Icon) on Nov 13, 2016 23:50:00 GMT -5

Good evening or morning friends. My bandmate and I wrote this song last weekend and buckled down hard today to get it all recorded. We have a few minor tweaks in mind but overall I'm really happy with how it has turned out for only being a week old.

In case your wondering, its yours truly singing and playing guitar

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Feel free to share your comments: positive or negative. Worried about hurting my feelings? I'm the type of person who considers himself lucky he feels anything at all. Be as mean as you want, I find honesty in negative comments and it causes the determination to improve. I look forward to reading that you love me.

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Colter Main Eventer Elvis sucks! Joined on: Mar 10, 2013 15:01:25 GMT -5 Posts: 4,439	I wrote a new song, looking for feedback from friendzzz Nov 13, 2016 23:56:41 GMT -5 3Lephant (Naptown Icon) likes this Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by Colter on Nov 13, 2016 23:56:41 GMT -5 I dug it a lot. To me, it gives off a The Killers-meets-Twenty-One-Pilots sort of vibe. Definitely wouldn't mind hearing more.

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Post by Chicago on Nov 14, 2016 2:17:02 GMT -5

Yeah, I agree with Colter . I would love to hear more from you guys based upon this one first listen.

You have a very soothing voice and I'm not just saying that to get into your pants. :-*

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Mr Angry Cena Main Eventer Joined on: Jun 22, 2014 20:45:20 GMT -5 Posts: 2,193	I wrote a new song, looking for feedback from friendzzz Nov 14, 2016 2:21:07 GMT -5 3Lephant (Naptown Icon) likes this Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by Mr Angry Cena on Nov 14, 2016 2:21:07 GMT -5 Awesome song, brotha! The more people who listen to this song the better. 🤘🏻

Old School Collector WF Legend Collecting Classics !!! Joined on: Sept 23, 2012 19:24:07 GMT -5 Posts: 5,932	I wrote a new song, looking for feedback from friendzzz Nov 18, 2016 15:40:14 GMT -5 via mobile Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by Old School Collector on Nov 18, 2016 15:40:14 GMT -5 Good stuff !
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BCizzle WF Legend Choice of the choicless Joined on: Mar 7, 2004 21:20:03 GMT -5 Posts: 7,416	I wrote a new song, looking for feedback from friendzzz Nov 23, 2016 2:25:35 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by BCizzle on Nov 23, 2016 2:25:35 GMT -5 It stuck in my head after listening to it. I didn't want it to, but it did! You talented bastard.

Valbroski WF Legend Bucko I thought hurricane season was over Joined on: Dec 30, 2011 14:53:33 GMT -5 Posts: 6,779	I wrote a new song, looking for feedback from friendzzz Nov 23, 2016 21:21:49 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by Valbroski on Nov 23, 2016 21:21:49 GMT -5 I dig it man, good stuff.
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Matt Tell Superstar My name actually isn’t Matt. Joined on: Sept 19, 2015 11:53:01 GMT -5 Posts: 614	I wrote a new song, looking for feedback from friendzzz Nov 24, 2016 5:36:26 GMT -5 via mobile Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Back to Top Post by Matt Tell on Nov 24, 2016 5:36:26 GMT -5 I really like it. You should put it on bandcamp for people to download. I want to have it on my phone.

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I wrote a new song, looking for feedback from friendzzz Dec 11, 2016 17:44:21 GMT -5

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Post by layzie on Dec 11, 2016 17:44:21 GMT -5

personally, i feel like the intent is there & youve got some interesting lyrics / word selection for sure, but something about the flow of the vocals doesnt feel fully natural to me. felt like some of it could have been tightened up a bit and it would've flowed a lot better. i'm sure you put alot of hours into it over the course of a weekend like you said, but i guess my biggest advice would just be not to put a cap on yourself in terms of just trying to bang out a recording man. its your baby and it needs to be cradled like such.

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