FDS RP: Enemy and Enemy Partners

Reckless my man your doing much better then you use to. That goes without saying though. First of all I want to congradulate you on winning your spot on FDS and proving you deserve it. Now onto the rp....

First of all I like the unique thing your doing with your rps, defining words that pertain to the match or the rp itself is something I havent seen alot of and it gives some unique charm to your stuff. Makes it your own so to speak.

Second, your description is lacking. Now its better then it use to be but this is an area that needs some work. Also your rp seems a lil sparadic to me. Like nothing your doing in your description has much correlation with your speech. I'm not saying because your angry in your speach you should hit everything. I'm merely saying I think your rps would flow better if you had a planned out kind of setting and movement within it that does kind of correlate with match or your speech. So on Description you need to expand and add more detail and try to make it flow better with the rp over all.

Third, Your speech is descent, but needs expanded on. I mean you make references to your opponents and the past now try something more. Try having a small conversation with a person in between. I mean only a few lines maybe but show some interaction with your surroundings and just kind of give more a real feel to the rp and not just you walking and talking to a camera.

Fourth, Try making comparisons to things and to your opponents. I mean i could come up with some examples right now but they would be bad ones. I think you know what im saying. Make interesting points about how your opponent is like somethign you doing or life or w/e. This seems easy enough but its hard to be clever about it and really come up with something genius. Once you get the hang of it, it will get easier.

Well that concludes my rp review, i plan to do many this week lol..Well anyways good luck in your match and at the PPV.

Revvie