5/18 FDS: Portrayed by Hollywood's leading actors

OOC: Prewriting rules. I had like 90% of this roleplay done before the card even went up. Was really hoping I was booked in a better match this week, because frankly this tag team match makes 0 sense, but I'll survive..

thoughts are red and all that shit.

First, why do you do so many flashbacks? I know a handful of roleplays have been scrapped off archives on here, but you've used the flashback sequence more than I can remember anyone in the last 3 years.
Oh and sorry I left the roleplays 1-1. I did have concepts and I'll probably use them some day, write out the roleplay, but not post it. That said, I did think this match was a nice change of pace, but I apologize for not getting a RP in, as I'm meeting problems of my own.

Now onto the roleplay.
The first segment kind of seemed like you were trying to stick to a format.
Trying to be multi-dimensional as far as layout goes, and scenes.... but this segment seemed so pointless.
I mean maybe my wording is harsh, but it seemed like you were testing something that never really got off the ground.
You basically acknowledged you and Ashley knew eachother since you both were in H.S. but the point of the conversation kind of left me wondering if I missed something in your last RP. It just came off strange. Nothing special in speech or presentation.

The second segment was a bit more interesting.
While I think Ashley's personality is on again, off again, executed well. I think we get that she is not the perfect mother, ahem, but it's almost as if sometimes text is all we get to read.
Though you do one thing some people trouble in, you know how to seperate the personalities.
I think the overall thesis here is, Ashley is not the best parent for Samantha, neither is Philip, but the scenario is Philip is doing whats right in his eyes for Samantha while Ashley is still an addict and can't spell Samantha, let alone give you a straight answer on whether she wants in on Samantha's life.

In a nutshell, the second segment to me had more continuation of the story you been telling. It took away from the balanced argument, and showed the glass house your living in.

Third Segment was ok, nothing to special.
I kind of miss the visits, but you don't wanna spend all you money on the quack.
This was really not great, the man just kind of came off as being there. Speech wasn't pretty, and Ashley really sometimes either is unique, or just there. This roleplay didn't really give her a unique presentation.

I dunno, it just kind of rolled to another scenario. I can understand getting out of the house, but this roleplay screamed to me, to many trips to the well. Ashley was a much larger part of the focuse but she hardly said or did anything of importance.

The only thing really left to cover was the eulogy, and I don't know really where to start with that. You kind of just have it there now. Almost as if a way to get more speech and less description out there. Not even really having to make it special, we "expect" Obo to trash anything and everything relating to the match. But we don't really have say in whether it's a waste or not. Personally I thought the sermon was weak for an ending.

The roleplay was good, but staircases below the last 3-4 roleplays you've done. I don't know if it was a creative issue either, just not the best dialogue. The description/scenes is neither here or there, as you know that isn't my field to speak on.