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Post by Kyzer on Feb 15, 2014 4:49:49 GMT -5
Well The New Epoch going into the Hall of Fame is a surprise. I always took drugs and bear mace as our claims to fame. And EBR. Titans suck.
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Post by Kyzer on Feb 11, 2014 23:42:42 GMT -5
The only thing worse than Immune would be Shane O'Riley.
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Post by Kyzer on Feb 9, 2014 23:49:31 GMT -5
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Post by Kyzer on Feb 7, 2014 19:37:44 GMT -5
E-fedding is taken way too seriously by people. There are things made to clean sand out of the vagina. It is the internet. There is no rules for decorum on the internet otherwise Schneider wouldn't be allowed around a computer. Brobeans needs to chill out. I personally enjoy the things that Devilkiller says which was the point of the post but whatever.
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Post by Kyzer on Feb 7, 2014 14:35:22 GMT -5
So I was entertained by you getting into it with Drakz. I have been around the WFWF longer than anyone present currently around, including Schneider though he likes to disagree. This place has always had people who don't get along. I have been in enough e-feds in the 12 years or so I have done this, to safely say that all e-feds are like that. I am very outspoken myself and have strong opinions I don't mind sharing regardless of how someone feels. I probably have more people who hate me than actually like me here. My point is though if you are good, if you can write, if you are talented, basically if you are looked at as someone who isn't an idiot then you can get away with voicing those strong opinions. Then you go after SYE, who is one of the most talented writers to ever set foot in any e-fed. Again, I was entertained, mostly from SYE's response pretty much shredding you. I don't bring any of this up to bash you. It actually is what got me to read your rp. It is funny that if you hadn't pissed on two people I respect around here (and there aren't many) I wouldn't have ever given this a look. Kudos on that, this is the first rp I have read in the WFWF in probably 10 months. The thread got locked for a reason. Can we please move on now? You obviously missed the point of everything you quoted.
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Post by Kyzer on Feb 7, 2014 3:00:57 GMT -5
So I was entertained by you getting into it with Drakz. I have been around the WFWF longer than anyone present currently around, including Schneider though he likes to disagree. This place has always had people who don't get along. I have been in enough e-feds in the 12 years or so I have done this, to safely say that all e-feds are like that. I am very outspoken myself and have strong opinions I don't mind sharing regardless of how someone feels. I probably have more people who hate me than actually like me here. My point is though if you are good, if you can write, if you are talented, basically if you are looked at as someone who isn't an idiot then you can get away with voicing those strong opinions.
Then you go after SYE, who is one of the most talented writers to ever set foot in any e-fed. Again, I was entertained, mostly from SYE's response pretty much shredding you. I don't bring any of this up to bash you. It actually is what got me to read your rp. It is funny that if you hadn't pissed on two people I respect around here (and there aren't many) I wouldn't have ever given this a look. Kudos on that, this is the first rp I have read in the WFWF in probably 10 months.
So onto the review. I didn't think it was bad. I think your formatting needs work because it is just kind of a mess. You need to work on punctuation and spelling big time. You are also a fan of the run on sentence. You will have a sentence with like five commas in it that would be better served by breaking up in several smaller ones. These things just cause the reader to be bogged down. The best writers get a rhythm going in their writing. It allows the reader to get more into the writing and stay hooked. My only other real criticism is how you portrayed Devilkiller in the final scene. It seems like you want him to come off as a dark badass. I could be reading this wrong. But if that is the case, don't have your character wearing pleather or his own merchandise. It just comes off cheesy. It isn't like you see Kane and Abyss wearing their own t-shirts. It works for John Cena and Daniel Bryan. But for a dark character or one that is suppose to be a badass, it is just lame.
Now these things aside, I don't consider this a bad rp. I can see where there is potential. I can only guess from your record you are relatively new here but 7 matches could have taken place over the course of a year with how this place can run at times. I don't know if you have a ton of e-fed writing experience or not, I have seen some truly terrible writers that have been at it for many years. To me personally, it seems as if this is all fairly new. I could be completely off base. Not terrible stuff for someone who is new. If you have been at this for years this will sound offensive, for that, I don't really care.
My overall suggestions for future rps, take time to read over your rp before you post it. Fix the formatting, punctuation and spelling your rps will read a lot better. There is a direct correlation between writing talent and coming off asinine. Like Trace will come off better being a douche to someone than some new scrub or someone that is universally considered a joke. Every era in the WFWF has the people considered to be completely out of touch with how good they are. Immune, Shane Diamond/O'Riley, Justa Mazing, Yukio Blaze, CBT and I could continue to name names. These are people who were looked at as jokes in the WFWF at some point or another. Some of them showed potential and brilliance at times. But for every one of them you have Drakz, Schneider, EBR, Alex Sean, Trace Demon, Reverend Shadow, Wayne(all his characters) and me. It just boils down to where you want to be in this fed. You have potential, just keep trying new things and read as much as you can from people outside of the WFWF. My style of writing wasn't commonplace when I got here. I brought something new and interesting. It made my mark. That is why you keep trying new things.
So all in all good luck. On a scale of 1-10. I would rate this a 5, which is good for the first rp I have read from you.
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Post by Kyzer on Feb 5, 2014 17:09:49 GMT -5
Everyone may want to tone down the vaginal hubris around Drakz or he may take it as a sign that your vaginas are fair game.
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Post by Kyzer on Jan 11, 2014 1:25:01 GMT -5
Kazuchika Okada has put on more top notch matches than anyone else in the last two years. Dude is amazing and the best wrestler around right now in my opinion. And at 26, that just means he is only going to get better.
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Post by Kyzer on Nov 10, 2012 14:52:58 GMT -5
It wasn't bad with all things considered. Horror adapted well to The New Epoch all leaving, EBR leaving and Raider apparently gone.
Good luck with things around here.
Good to see Zmaster back too.
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Post by Kyzer on Nov 7, 2012 22:44:02 GMT -5
I have started watching Dr. Who. I just started David Tennant. So many better things you can watch than that piece of shit.
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Post by Kyzer on Nov 7, 2012 18:18:00 GMT -5
Huh. If I had any ideas, I'd definitely be down to give it another world, especially since it seems a lot....slower here than back in the day. I remember when I was Lost Spirit back in ing 2003 (!!) or so, WFWF was straight up militant. I still remember my dude Demolisher getting screwed by Rupert Jee! #neverforget Jee was always fair in my opinion. It was Destroyer and Flaps who I took more issue with.
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Post by Kyzer on Oct 31, 2012 23:36:04 GMT -5
I am done. I tried to force something out for my rp and it was all garbage. This isn't fun anymore. I will return when it does become fun again for me. I am sorry to all it affects, I am sorry if it s stuff up for people. I suck. My bad.
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Post by Kyzer on Oct 23, 2012 14:43:51 GMT -5
I remember when you and I were tag team champions for several days when CBT died. Pretty sure you are the only one. E has said many times that you two were never champions together.
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Post by Kyzer on Oct 20, 2012 19:46:10 GMT -5
I contemplated it, I actually did. But I've been trying to book Slanted and Co. and Scarlett every other week as to not double book him or to book too heavy any one character unless he specifically comes to me and tells me otherwise. Plus, Slanted/Enchanted's beef is with Cameron Stone (as has been shown since SotF) so getting them embroiled in a side feud with Schneider despite what happened last show would be counterproductive to Slanted/Stone and Schneider/Brennan in a way...why have his mind elsewhere when Brennan's ideally his main focus given he's defending against him in three shows? I mean, if y'all had wanted differently, that would have been fine, but I just used that way of thinking since I hadn't been told otherwise. But regardless, it should be a great match regardless and such. Haha. You have sound logic there. Is this really Horror?
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Post by Kyzer on Oct 17, 2012 0:39:40 GMT -5
Done
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Post by Kyzer on Oct 15, 2012 23:42:21 GMT -5
Just something I'd like to point out to the group, that I realized while talking with Meg tonight.. In light of the extremely lengthy periods of time between shows, there's a very significant possibility that I will become the longest reigning WFWF Heavyweight Champion in history. Johnny Michaels held the title from 4/24/05 to 2/22/06, roughly 11 months. That is currently the longest WFWF Heavyweight title reign (which is ironic in itself, since he was booking the fed during his entire reign and very rarely booked himself, but I degrees). Reigns longer than my current almost exactly 7 month reign include: - EBR's second reign, from 2/19/08 to 9/18/08 (which I will have passed by the time results are up, if I didn't already. Don't feel like checking dates)
- Thunder's second reign, from 11/18/08 to 7/31/09
- EBR's third reign, from 2/17/11 to 11/9/11.
I should have passed the three reigns mentioned above by the time the Brennan defense happens unless a small miracle happens and we somehow start having more than one show a month. Realistically speaking, the Brennan defense could even come after the 11 month mark, considering we're 3 shows out (someone correct me if I'm wrong, because I'll need to modify some plans) from that defense. The way things are going lately, I could pass the 11 month mark before these results are up Are you really bragging about a reign that has had nothing occur? One that occurred by some fluke chance to begin with? Your ego is bigger than mine sir. Hats off.
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Post by Kyzer on Oct 15, 2012 22:44:25 GMT -5
I personally have been horrible at reading and replying to them for the last few shows. It is a struggle to motivate myself to read any rp lately. I was in multiple feds for awhile because this one ran so slow. If Drakz and Brennan weren't around after E left, I would have focused on them more then here and not been around. Drakz knows because I have been bitching to him, my motivation for this place hasn't been high.
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Post by Kyzer on Oct 13, 2012 22:55:57 GMT -5
So my computer crap the bed and I just got it back today. Without boring everyone with the reasons, there wasn't a convenient or a practical means for me to access the boards. I apologize to Horror as I know I was supposed to write something and get it to him about a week ago but I see other things have happened. Good news, I get my cast off next week so this becomes easier. PM's will be going out to those that deserve/need/basically those I give a about. So yeah, my bad.
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Post by Kyzer on Sept 24, 2012 23:56:03 GMT -5
I am working on something, which is including something that I had worked up for the ppv but then didn't finish because of other reasons.
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Post by Kyzer on Sept 8, 2012 3:14:49 GMT -5
I am going to brutally honest here. This rp makes me wonder how you ever beat me. This was by far the worst rp I have read from you since I returned. It reminded me distinctly of rps that Drakz and myself put out in 2006 but bad.
I get you want to take Schneider to a darker side but this was just short of a snuff film which isn't a compliment. Your monologues were slightly better than the rest but still fell short of what you have done in the past. You just sound crude and unintelligent at times.
I am disappointed that I read this rp.
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