WFW - Nitro! - Episode 2!

Not a bad showing there from you at all, tons and tons of potential man.

Arena is nice and clean and you made an effort to cover the vhs tapes so that's a plus. Try string loses, you'd be surprised how little you need to edit them, it at all due to your background.

Try transition pictures some of your sequences were awkward. Punk pushing edge I to the corner post and the f-5

You didn't have many stiff poses but the ones you did just bend the joints a little more. I love your Steve, great use of an old set. Live on the pose board. Most sequences on there get feedback and you will improve! I promise you that. The power bomb pose at the end was a little screwy.



Very enjoyable show and with a little polishing this will be an elite fed on his board

Great stuff here. Nice improvement over episode 1.
Nice surprise at the end, didnt see that coming.
Your stories are good, im intrigued to see what happens which is important

A few stiff poses but that happens to the best of them

Looking forward to episode 3!

I knew it Bryan was going to stab Hogan in the back. Should be interesting where that goes.

Cm Punk Vs. Edge good match with nice flow and pace to it. And Punk winning was nice to continue the feud. Can't wait for Edge to get his revenge on Punk.

RVD Vs. Rey Mysterio is very nice feud here. Interesting to see their wifes get into the mix. Can't wait for the match next episode.

Rock Vs. Bryan not the greatest match it was good. I like Lesnar as body guard for Rock. Just bland match. Looks like Bryan got played.

Lesnar against Rock and HHH as champ.

Overall it was nice little episode. Not the greatest i've seen. But it's step up. Maybe work on the poses a little and have longer match's. 7/10 Can't wait for more improving.

Getting around to watching this...hoping to see some improvement.
New entrance stage is great.
Daniel Bryan turning heel and attacking Hogan? It was a well executed segment, but I really don't think Bryan vs Hogan could be good at all. I'm eager to see you prove me wrong.
Edge vs Punk didn't have too many bad poses, but the pacing was really off.
Here's RVD. This wife angle is rather odd, but eh. The segment was alright. RVD vs Rey is an obviously good matchup, but I don't really know why you'd toss their wives into the mix. First show I found it funny, now it's just odd.
Mankind vs Big E? Eh?
And he squashes Mankind. I highly dislike this decision. Big E's getting the monster push, that's all good, but don't have him squash a high tier wrestler like Mick. Him squashing a midcarder woulda been a lot better.
And now a segment to advance the wife plot.
Bryan vs Rock was okay, and the screwy finish made sense.

So what were my thoughts on this show?
Incredibly rushed....even for a weekly format show. Mankind vs Big E was horrid booking wise, especially if you plan on utilizing Foley as a higher profile performer in the future. Edge vs Punk felt more like a brawl then a match. Bryan vs Rock was MOTN, with a screwy finish that made some sense, until HHH came out with the belt.

Story-wise, I really don't know how to put this. Bryan basically turning heel by assaulting a legend....a match that could be good depending on how you depict Hogan. Edge wanting to shut Punk up, which is interesting enough. The wife angle, which is creative, but not particularly good so far. Big E vs Khalli, which is alright I guess, tho I'd prefer Khali just be another victim of Big E. And the Brock-Rock alliance. There's plenty of coherent story development here, but none of it really interests me, none of it really makes me say "I wonder what's gonna happen next show", which is obviously the feeling that HHH coming out with belt was going for, but it had me shaking my head rather then "huh i wonder why". The booking makes sense, but nothing you've done so far really stands out to me.

Presentation wise, largely the same as the first show, but I like the new ramp.

Posing wise, not the most amazing but not bad.

Simply put, so far, your fed isn't really great to me. It's not terrible, but as it is, the word that would describe it most to me is "okay". Until your first PPV, I won't have a definitive opinion on your fed, so I hope some time between now and then it gets less rushed, and a little more compelling storywise.

TBH, not as good as your first show.


6/10

I'll pm you about the storylines further explaining myself if I still have a problem with them come your first PPV. Because right now the storylines are in their infancy, and my judging of them was based off of the development in the first two shows. I'm only judging them based off of what I'm seeing at the moment, and if I still have a problem by time your first ppv, then that means there might actually be something wrong with them and not me judging stories that haven't even had time to fully develop yet.

-Arena could do with a bit more black card, but the entrance is cool
-Didn't like the way Bryan dispatched of Hogan. Would have been more believable had he used a chair or other foreign object, plus it would have been a more heel type action
-I do like that you're making Bryan a heel though
-Thought Punk could have used the mic that Hogan used in the opening segment. Seemed strange unless he was just chatting at the camera on his way down
-Punk/Edge was steady. After a GTS, there wasn't really a need for Punk to use the ropes. I get that it's a heel tactic, but maybe after a basic impact move it would've been good, e.g. a Suplex
-RVD/Rey segment was cool. A like the way you're going with their wives getting involved
-Really didn't like what Big E did to Mankind, unless you're going to take it further with Mankind where he's a washed-up hasbeen and feuds with someone that way. Otherwise, it's just like he's a jobber
-Saying that, I like the look of Big E/Khali
-Will be interested to see if Punk has any involvement in the tag match
-RVD/Maria could've been done in a different place, rather than the same spot where Bischoff had been speaking to Rey seconds before
-And now Rock/Brock are there too
-A Heel/Heel is interesting as the main event. RVD/Punk will be heel/heel too. You need more faces!
-Nice swerve at the end, and it'll be good to see Rock/Brock clash

A steady show. I think some of your storylines need to play out a bit more first. It seems that you're jam packed with main eventers, which you need to manage carefully. More midcarders and lower card wrestlers would be good. I like that every match and segment has a purpose though, as it really helps push things on.

It's hard because I think the whole mid carder thing applies to WWE runs. This isn't WWE, so for example if I had Macho Man, whilst he was a main eventer in WWE, I don't think he would be in my fed. Big names, sure. Definitely working on backstage sections and there's a big chance #3 has the ASR.

Thank you man. Rock Lesnar is going to be an interesting one

Wasn't what I expected, Bryan coming out to beat up Hogan - not sure he'd have been able to lift Hogan with quite as much ease, but I like the whole idea behind it.

Punk vs Edge was well done, for the most part. One of your poses, the belly-to-belly, looked like Punk had straight up mirdered Edge. Would have been nice to see you use some string there.

Was a bit iffy on the RVD promo - didn't feel so much like it was something he'd say, more a generic. I thought the whole jam with Mysterio's wife was a bit ehh too.

Big E certainly looked dominant, but Mankind looked totally worthless. I'm not sure if E is just getting booked as an absolute monster, or if you're simply using Mankind as a jobber, but it seems confusing to the casual viewer - Id assume - to see a name like Mankind beaten so easily.

Rock promo was great, you were definitely able to make it sound like a Rock promo.

Is this a heel vs heel main event? Interested to see what you do with it. Interesting to see HHH brought back by Bischoff - and im interested to see whether you write Trips as a face, because otherwise I think you could end up with too many main event heels.

I just watched Episode #2 of WFW Nitro.



There have been some noticeable minor tweaks to the show which i liked, you've already mentioned that crowd printouts and backgrounds are going to be used in future episodes so i have removed this 'issue' from the dislikes. Overall there are more pros to cons in watching WFW so here is what i thought:



Likes:

• Arena and Entrance stage is excellent. Really looks great. I would suggest as the opening show image you do a close up of the stage and pan out to the crowd and then broadcast team as a show intro this would make it look great. Possibly add in the location of where your events are being held?
• Posing has improved, i liked particularly the Rock's opening hand before striking Daniel Bryan.
  
  
• Great Power bomb by Lesnar on D-Bry through the table.
  
  
• Great use of Eric Bischoff while Flair was absent.
  
  
• Good solid ending to the show a real swerve curve ball at the end with the Game being given his title and continuing his Championship Reign.
  
  

Dislikes:

This is more a spottable potential error in the scripting rather than an out and out dislike?

When D-Bry attacks Hulk Hogan, Jerry 'the king' lawler says

"It's a historical moment in 8years of WFW, and it's been ruined by Hogan" (I think this is meant to say Bryan because Bryan attacked Hogan? lol



Matches between
Edge vs CM Punk and
Big E vs ManKind
were too short IMO. Edge had maybe one or two shots before Punk hit GTS for a 3 count? I'm sure this would of made an upper mid-card event but Edge looked like he was jobbing?
Even worse for Mankind, got a build up only to be jobbing to Big E? I mean Mankind was known to take a tremendous amount of punishment in his day but here he looked like joe 'random' jobber off the street in a squash match?



Summary

Technically because the first dislike is more a proof read/error it's not so much a dislike, my only real issue would be those two matches were short and could of had more quality wrestling especially when referring to superstars Mankind + Edge! :-)



I really like what you've done in the two shows you've put out, i would suggest next time just proof reading your show before publishing.



My tip for show balance and flow is this: Grab a side of lined A4 at the top write down your match combatants. so for example.

Edge Vs RVD

Then in the side column write each number down the page 1-24 and do the same continuing on the other side until you reach about 38-40



In slot 1+2 have the intro for wrestler 1

In slot 3+4 have the intro for wrestler 2



Then have from 5 on wards the move sets for your match (write this in pencil first so that if you want to edit or change something you can erase it out).



Just like a short story your matches should have a beginning, a middle and an ending. Think about the move sets of the characters you're using in the ring, if need be re watch DVDs and practice those move sets in the ring with your figures. You're working with highly articulated figures and with practice and patience you'll get a better flow, variety of move sets and a much better product at the end.



If you would like, please message me when show #3 is out. I do like the direction your show is heading and it's 95% positive!



RAW

P.S I'll send you an example via PM of the show structure i used in my fed, by all means copy the layout if you think it will help extend those future matches.