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Post by Devilkiller on Aug 13, 2019 1:02:51 GMT -5
Damn I'm 19 am I the only one here not allowed to legally drink 😂😂 You're 19? That's crazy. By the time you're 21, you'll be happily drinking anything you want and you'll be one of the best writers around. Probably. I assume atleast.
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Post by Devilkiller on Aug 13, 2019 0:52:55 GMT -5
I'm in permanent vacation mode (until a week from today), and I couldn't make the fix if I wanted to anyway because WF gonna WF, but Frank Lynn has been International Champion for 521 days. Drinks are on me boys! Now that I'm 21, I can legally drink! When we going?
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Post by Devilkiller on Aug 13, 2019 0:43:50 GMT -5
Yep. Even with a slight extension, this is what I put out.
It's been emotionally draining this week, nothing compared to what Cam is going through, but enough. Then whatever momentum I had today, was squashed out of me after finding out someone from my childhood died at 23.
But I'm okay with this. I was okay with my last one though. I just hope my efforts of taking the advice I got last show showed through in this.
Cameron, we both weren't at 100%, but that's okay. We're going to Hell with a bit of Texas. Let's go make history brother. Nothing but love to the Popple from the Killer.
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Post by Devilkiller on Aug 13, 2019 0:41:23 GMT -5
Devilkiller RP: HELL Hath No Fury
Hell hath no fury like a mother f**ker with everything to prove.
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So why in the world did you do that?
Do what?
Accept the challenge?
Because J, I want to show the world that I could beat him. Now or then, it was always me.
What was always you?
The rightful superstar to the throne.
And if you lose?
There isn't a 'if I lose' scenario.
You're in a match with a veteran opponent with a stipulation that you know jack s**t about. You're telling me you got this?
What can I say, I've always been a bit egotistical.
Atleast you admit it at times.
Always. Are we taking the plane together?
Yeah, tell them to buy our tickets together.
Dad! Can we go play?
Devilkiller hangs up the cell phone at the high pitched voice of his son. Devilkiller's eyes meets his offsprings from across the room and stands up, deciding to spend time with his little man.
Wanna fight on the trampoline?
Yeah! Let's fight!
The fighting on the trampoline starts off with Devilkiller picking his son up and running outside with him, slamming him down on the trampoline in a running powerslam type move. The father-son duo "fight" for a moment or two, until Carter hits his dad with a big "choke slam" for the win.
The two share a hug and some laughs, but for some reason something is eating at Carter.
Dad, I know we haven't talked much about it, but why did you do what you did?
What do you mean buddy?
You know what I mean. The thing you did on TV.
Devilkiller sighs and sits up on the trampoline. The sky starts to fade to orange and red streaks across the sky and the scenery changes from a backyard to lights all on around on a lighting rig and a wrestling ring. Devilkiller remembers holding up Daniel Knight, flipping him as Anna Ahriman helped pull him into the mat neck first. The audible crack echoing in his mind. Much like the baseball bat still echoing.
Because he did a very bad thing. What he did was, something that should've never happened. It was meant for the other guy, but that didn't happen because he ran away.
Devilkiller's voice trails off as he sinks back to Stay Gold, trying to remember every little detail. He looks pauses the memory and looks around, sees the crowd and spots Needles, so he rewinds said memory and tries to follow Needles as much as he can. He sees Billy Broom stop him, then he sees Frank Lynn stop him, then he sees just who he suspected.
Why didn't I remember he stopped him? Why didn't I notice in the moment? The music played and everything. Why would he stop him of all people?
Dad, you're doing it again.
Devilkiller snaps back to the present and shakes his head. What? I didn't do anything bud.
Dad, let's stop doing this. You're trying to joke and say you don't know but you know. You keep talking to yourself, but it's more than that. Your eyes roll back and you look dead. Please go to a doctor for me. Mom is thinking you're just going crazy.
I am fine Carter now drop it. I don't need to hear how a 10 year old can diagnose something that isn't even happening. Devilkiller's voice raises to a stern instruction before rolling off of the trampoline, looking at his son and shaking his head before going back in the house.
Wow, nice parenting out there, father.
Devilkiller's head snaps around to meet Kaitlyn's eyes from the kitchen. He makes his way across the living room and into the kitchen to face Kaitlyn. What like you're so perfect?
You're acting like a 6 year old Logan grow the f**k up. Why do you feel like you have any goddamn right treating your son like that? He is worried about his dad, and you don't care at all. You're honestly going crazy and you NEED to see a doctor. You talk to yourself atleast once a week and it's scaring both of us.
THERE IS NOTHING WRONG WITH ME! Stop saying there's something wrong with me goddammit. I know what is and isn't wrong. I don't f**king talk like you say I do I don't f**king roll my eyes back I don't f**king do anything!
Logan, if you don't notice it, and you're in this much denial, then we have a bigger issue at hand besides-
Devilkiller spins around and punches the wall of the kitchen as hard as he can, there's a small "creak" of the wood and a louder, more audible crack of his knuckles connecting with a stud in the wall.
Son of a bitch!
You're crazy Logan. This right here proves it. You happy your broke your knuckles?
Devilkiller, while holding his hand stares glaringly at Kaitlyn as he goes to the freezer and grabs an ice pack and lays it on his hand and wraps it up with some medical tape to hold it in place.
Last thing I'll say about it, and I'll leave you alone. Please, just go to a doct-
No. That's final.
Kaitlyn looks down and back outside at Carter, wiping a tear from her cheek. Devilkiller walks out to go sit on the front porch.
What is their problem with me? Why can't I get a break? I.. I just have to focus. Push them aside. It's do or die time.
What would be the reasoning Cameron Stone would stop Needles? I mean, he got whacked by him, but dig deeper DK. Why did he even care about Needles that first time? Why did he go into the ring to try to stop the onslaught? If it was sincere, wouldn't he have, well you know, offered to fight Needles?
He's a book I can't quite read. I hope I read him in HELL. If not... If not then that's it.
The day changes to night and back to day again, cigarette smoke rising from a newly lit one in Devilkiller's mouth, as the weekend of HELL arrives. He doesn't say anything to his family, doesn't even acknowledge them except for the simple "bye love you" response.
While in the Uber, he reflects on the past week or so, and wonders if there really is anything wrong with him. He doesn't remember much. He doesn't remember getting in the Uber but knows he's in it. He doesn't remember lighting a cigarette but knows he did it. There's a lot to unpack but he knows he has a lot of time between now and HELL. What a time to be alive.
-----Hotel Room, 8:43PM, Saturday Before HELL-----
Same size, roughly same build. Same accolades. He has an extra championship but you were too busy setting records instead of winning multiple championships. So now where are we at?
Motive. Just to have fun?
Jayson and Devilkiller are standing over the desk with a Budweiser in their hands as they discuss the match. Jayson nods his head in agreement to Devilkiller's statement.
Possibly. He's a movie star. He's main evented SuperBrawl. There's not much for him to do besides win the title, and if that was his goal why would he do an open challenge?
Right. He has a kid at home, young one at that. Why the stipulation? To try to match everyone else? Or for another tick added to his resumé?
He wants to be in the history book. He wants to be able to say he won a match that wasn't exactly in the record books of WFWF. He picked something that's relatively safe so the risk is lower. Just two big guys trading blows attached to a rope. You think you can hit nastier blows?
Devilkiller nods now, taking a sip of the beer. Possibly. I can do what I can that's for sure. I think I can get him. I got Penny Shannon, I think I got him. I've outlasted him before. Long, long time ago. I think I can do it again.
Just stay in one piece to come back home to your family.
Devilkiller looks away from the bottle to look at Jayson, who stays looking down at the bottle. I might actually stay with you when I come back.
Why?
Because my family thinks I'm crazy.
Because you talk to yourself?
Devilkiller takes a step back, clenching the stained brown glass bottle in his hand. H.. How do you know that?
Jayson looks up at Devilkiller and gives one of those half smiles, the ones that aren't really a smile but more of a 'I know' type deal.
I've noticed it some. Then Kaitlyn called me-
She called you? And you're taking her side? What the f**k dude? I thought we were friends?
I am! I'm not taking anyone's side besides Carter's. He's like my nephew. I hate him thinking his dad hates him. So please, all I'm asking is to show you love him. Go to a doctor, or atleast fake a doctors appointment to show him. Please.
Devilkiller unclenches his hand from around the bottle to allow more blood flow to come back to it. He hangs his head and nods.
Okay. Okay J, I'll go. Without sounding like a complete ass, but I need you to leave. Kinda down and kinda wanna lay in my bed and listen to silence.
With that, Jayson nods and walks toward the door, stopping with his hand on the knob. If you need me, call me.
With that, he walks out and shuts the door behind him, leaving Devilkiller alone with his own thoughts. He downs what's left of his beer and lays it on the desk, falling onto the bed with his clothes still on. He stares up at the ceiling, his walls come crumbling down as he sobs softly.
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Devilkiller is in a red lit room for another of his talks. He's sitting in a metal folding chair with a mirror in front of him. Red face paint with black smudges and streaks all around cover his face as he looks into the mirror, in turn looking into the camera.
It's funny. So many years ago we were in the same battle royal for the #1 contendership for the WFWF title. 2012 I believe the year was. Weird how the universe has a way of righting the wrongs it created, huh?
That was my first chance. My first opportunity. I lost it. Funnily enough, I outlasted you in that match. I went a further distance. And I was only three matches in and you couldn't hang?
But look at what happened. You went on to main event the biggest show for us and I was left to dry. This isn't necessarily an attack on you, it's more of the company. It should've been me. I was always the one that should've been in your spot. I could've went a longer distance than you in that Chamber match, just like I did at Revolution December 24th 2012. I could've done it again. I definitely could've done it again. Somehow the universe made the wrong decision. This is how it makes it right.
This is the universe hitting the reset switch. This is the universe righting the wrong and offering you up to me. Will I be able to capitalize?
I honestly am so excited to face you. Not just to get my redemption. It's an honor to step in the ring with someone who was just feet from he top of the mountain, just to come rolling down in a blaze of glory. So yeah, I'll be able to capitalize.
This isn't my swan song. If I lose, I lose everything. You have nothing to lose. It's a win-win for you. Promote a movie, win or lose a match, leave again for months or years when it doesn't go your way. This can definitely be your swan song. You have nothing to fight for, besides a young little girl at home, and even then you have nothing to prove.
You look at things objectively, so let's look at it objectively. I've been on a solid roll since I've came back. I've set records, though now broken, I set it. I've shown I can do it. I've shown I can break them. You say you've pinned Drakz, congratulations. I may not pin him but I'll definitely pull out every stop, every small detail brought to life, because I can outlast you. I have a better chance than you.
The unfortunate thing for you, is I have much bigger fish to fry than you, a once upon a time name who just showed back up for the first time in a minute. Look at me, calling the kettle black when I'm no more but a pot.
But see I'm no one trick pony. A pot can make tea, soup, popcorn if you try hard enough, you can even bake with a pot. A kettle? You're making tea and coffee. That's where I got you.
Come prepared for HELL, Cameron Stone. I'm not who you think I am. I'm someone that has redemption coming my way, I'm someone that has tricks up my sleeves, I'm someone that isn't leaving after this match.
One last word of caution for the 'Greatest Canadian Export', Hell hath no fury like a motherf**ker with everything to prove.
With that, Devilkiller stands up from his chair and rears his fist back, but stops, dropping his hand and instead just turns and walks out of the room.
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Devilkiller
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Post by Devilkiller on Aug 6, 2019 0:34:24 GMT -5
S**t, I was busy today so I didn't get the chance to log on earlier butttttt.... HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO Devilkiller!!! Please, drink responsibly. Thanks Mesh! And of course I did. No driving after I opened a drink, actually didn't drive at all afterwards.
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Devilkiller
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Post by Devilkiller on Aug 5, 2019 0:21:50 GMT -5
No motivation. Gonna try to gain some when sobriety goes out the window. I always wrote better as a depressed drunk anyway. Let's see if it can save me one more time, shall we? I'm currently in the middle of getting kicked out of my house by my stepdad, haven't started yet, and my RP will likely be written in one two hour window at the library. You're probably good lol Much love to the Popple. Please, get your main stuff fixed first then worry about me. Glad to learn from you sir, and I hope everything gets better.
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Devilkiller
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Post by Devilkiller on Aug 4, 2019 0:22:26 GMT -5
No motivation. Gonna try to gain some when sobriety goes out the window. I always wrote better as a depressed drunk anyway. Let's see if it can save me one more time, shall we?
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Devilkiller
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 30, 2019 11:56:31 GMT -5
Not gonna lie and tell you I'm gonna do a lot this show. My focus is on my RP, and since I'll be turning 21 August 5th, and I'm taking holiday from then until the 9th, I'm gonna be doing a whole lot of nothing but drinking that week. So if my RP has ranting in it, know it was done in a non-sobered state. You're stealing my bit.Guess I can add "influencer" to my resume. Yes! That's exactly what mine is gonna sound like!
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 29, 2019 21:44:24 GMT -5
Not gonna lie and tell you I'm gonna do a lot this show. My focus is on my RP, and since I'll be turning 21 August 5th, and I'm taking holiday from then until the 9th, I'm gonna be doing a whole lot of nothing but drinking that week. So if my RP has ranting in it, know it was done in a non-sobered state.
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 27, 2019 11:55:24 GMT -5
And I'm not even going to edit it, because at this point, my heat is so nuclear it makes the sun look like Alaska.
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 27, 2019 11:49:24 GMT -5
Kyzer ain't Brennan, appreciate it's an easy mistake to make. More pressingly, Brennan ain't Kyzer. In my defense, I use the BS Tapatalk, and it doesn't show me the names only the username. But that is still a big up. Burn me at the stake, I'll take my roast as I slowly fade into obscurity.
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 27, 2019 3:13:28 GMT -5
Meh. Your worst day is still a day I have to try my hardest. Don't sell yourself short. You are a good writer. An ego can be a good thing. Thank you Brennan. Hopefully your words ring true. I guess at this point only time will tell. Weird, some 6 or so years ago you and I were going to feud over the National title. Atleast I think we were. Memory has been messed up a lot from epilepsy but still think I remember this. If you saw something in me then, and still see it now, it's time not to let ya down.
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 27, 2019 0:36:25 GMT -5
Given crap going on at home my stuff won't be great but I'm in since I have the match booked already Meh. Your worst day is still a day I have to try my hardest.
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 26, 2019 16:02:46 GMT -5
Count me in, Maria.
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 22, 2019 21:40:52 GMT -5
I'm glad for this show. Now with BRENNAN back in the fold, maybe more advice for guys like me stuck somewhere between horrible and decent. Think that's plausible Deep Figure Value ?
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 20, 2019 22:08:14 GMT -5
I'm glad Deep Figure Value is co-owner. I think March quality is only going to go up.
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 20, 2019 22:04:54 GMT -5
Important Update:I'm not in the hospital. I am on some quick fix meds, back to a restricted diet, and doctor's orders to gets lots of rest and reduce stress. That's all good. I spent most of yesterday taking a long hard look at things and had to come to the decision that until my health is truly back to 100% and I'm no longer in danger of a sudden dramatic flare up, I need to cut back on my involvement on the more stress inducing aspects of my life, which unfortunately includes being an owner of the WFWF. Sorry guys, that means I think it's time for me to officially step down. I have such an enthusiasm for this place and want to truly make it fun for all involved, to produce the most entertaining shows featuring every single one of you in compelling stories, to make this place continues to grow and prosper. Problem is, I want it so bad I stress out over every little detail and that doesn't help my health at a time when in real life I'm dealing with two parents in their mid 70s suffering major health problems of their own with brain tumors and blood clots and other problems brought on by old age. We've already discussed some backup plans had I ended up in the hospital and at this point I think it is best to move forward with what we discussed for ownership. I should be able to continue to RP and contribute ideas to the owners but I have to take a hard pass on dealing with any of the behind the scenes drama that can make life as an owner difficult. Any previous owners know what I'm talking about. Recruiting, booking around a constantly rotating cast of players, making sure every match gets the attention it deserves, dealing with personality conflicts, ... it all adds up and takes a toll. The ride had its ups and downs but for the most part it was fun. I'd like to think it started with a bang at Back to Basics and ended with a bigger bang at SB X. Thanks to all of you who supported and helped me out during my tenure. TL;DR: I have to step down for my health. Sorry guys. I'm sick and tired of being sick and tired. I'm so sorry dude. I wish you a speedy recovery
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 19, 2019 13:53:18 GMT -5
Holy moly...I somehow managed to either completely forget or completely overlook the fact that he had a title run. That's...pretty bad, considering the work I did on tidying up the title histories. Well run is a generous term, I believe he had one title win and one title loss without a defence (like half of my title 'runs'). Let me note for the record, Carter took that L from me. Grateful he got it off of you, so I win it for the short time. He was a nice guy. Same could be said for Andrew Carter, but the later but he just never showed. Something else happened with him but I don't remember what it was. Maybe someone can enlighten me.
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 10, 2019 15:15:14 GMT -5
I think that there's more quantity here than your previous work with the DK character, but that doesn't necessarily translate to quality. That's not to say that this piece, itself, is necessarily bad, but I think it falls short put up to some of your earlier stuff. I feel as though you took a different direction here - glancing over your earlier works, you typically had a penchant for pointed, snappy narration. It moved the scene along, wasn't too flowery, and it seemed to suit your style. Here, I feel like you were looking to flesh that out more. I recognized it instantly because it's something of a hallmark of my own work - I like to think I have a "Bishop-on-monologues"-esque handle on my narratives. The problem, I think is that if you're not overly cautious with the way you want something to read in taking that approach, it's really, really easy to fall into a trap of coming off clunky. King Richius already pointed out an example. One that sticks out to me comes right off the bat, where you lead with "For those reading that don't know, Devilkiller was involved in a very serious match at SuperBrawl X." The writer's inclination is that "Devilkiller was involved in a very serious match at SuperBrawl X" feels truncated as an introductory, and that some manner of preamble is going to make it flow better, and that's not wrong. It's actually dead on the money. The problem is that you have to be really, really choosy about how you phrase that, otherwise it just winds up reading informally, which doesn't lend itself to a palpable fiction read. It sort of attaches a personage to the narration in a way, which, without either being specified or at the very least established, takes away the flow of things. Like Rich said, there's plenty of meat on this bone. I think you've long demonstrated a considerable amount of potential to be a better writer. Your biggest challenge, from my vantage point, is tightening up the total product, trimming the fat, and delivering a product that's all killer, no filler. In fleshing out the narrative, you showed a tendency to harp on details that, while seemingly more macro-esque story elements, did very little for the overall product. I'm wondering if there was some communicative breakdown regarding your shared scene with Mason. Usually, I'd be all praise for each of you offering your own take on it, but here, the "differences" were applicable solely to the actual dialogue, which was identical in many places, but markedly different in others. It was kind of weird and instantly noticeable, having read both pieces. There's opportunity here, and I think if you heed the advice given to you, you could really turn out something pretty impressive in short order. It's a shame you had to eke out another win via no-show, especially in a main event capacity that felt like it was being offered up as a guided favor to the other guy. Least you deserved was opposition. Thank you for all the advice, and I am definitely going to take it. Surprisingly, no one has said anything about what I thought they would. I won't speak of it yet incase someone does, which means one of two things. I either made it work fairly well and no one notices, or the rest of the RP is absolute sh*t and it isn't a big deal compared to the rest of it. I hope I can improve and get better for next show.
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Post by Devilkiller on Jul 10, 2019 0:29:05 GMT -5
I think this is a good piece. I have no complaints about the writing and particularly enjoyed the little touches like calling DK's mom "the creator of the creator". Problem is, after reading it I was left a little flat. I think it's because DK and Billy Broom's stories are similar, being centered around Needles attack on Mesh and how it has inspired them to get some sort of justice and/or vengeance. Having read the Billy RP first and acknowledging that it is pretty damn good, I think that left an uphill climb for you with this piece and is why I was left feeling flat. Also, maybe it's just me but the first few paragraphs where you gave the backstory for DK's post SB injuries and activities didn't quite work for me. I think there could have a better perspective to give us that info without resorting to a seemingly out of place narration. I'm going to reread the piece tomorrow to make sure I give it a fair shake and I plan to read those paragraphs in Morgan Freeman's voice because he makes all narration better. Again, I don't think this is bad. There's a lot I like in your writing. Its just a case of bad timing more than anything else that it it is both similar to and yet doesn't quite hold up to Mesh's take on Billy Broom in the same show. One last note. If/when you edit your pieces look for sentences like this: He was just watching SuperBrawl and he was just talking to his family.It reads clunky and would be better if you simplified it to: He was just watching SuperBrawl and talking to his family.Any and all advice helps. I see other ways I could've went about the narration. I'm my mind I was thinking "it will work, it just needs a quick brush through, nothing else" and that's why I did that, but there are multiple ways I could've done that without narrating. I'll work on that in the future. Thanks Rich.
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