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Post by Kyzer on May 19, 2012 1:27:10 GMT -5
F*cking sweet.
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Post by Kyzer on May 18, 2012 22:45:17 GMT -5
How's the card coming along? It's later than usual. You're finally booked against Schneider.. time to end the feud. lol No point for that now since Sabat is the national champ.
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Post by Kyzer on May 16, 2012 16:52:00 GMT -5
I think you're reading the match wrong. Opening brawl on the floor, Mak got the best. Then Schneider pulled him apart in the ring, working one body part. Then there was a very even striking exchange. Then the attempted highspots, including Mak reversing out of the Beverly Kills 90210.. Then the finish was a DQ, and it would've been a DQ either way. The other finish seen Hutton attacking Mak with the chair, walking away laughing that he cost Schneider the match, a brawl on the ramp, then the same end game with a piledriver on the ramp. Every match can't be back and forth even, and most well formatted matches aren't. One wrestler gets the advantage, usually the heel through nefarious means (such as using the ring rope connectors..) and causes damage, then works at that damage. The damage is either too much for the babyface to overcome, or the babyface fights the uphill battle and comes back. This is the generic format for literally every wrestling match ever, except mid 90s TV squashes and psychology lacking flip fests. To tell a story in a match, one person must be superior to the other, even if in different aspects, they are matched. I get what you mean with psychology but every match you write is the same. Schneider dominates and then wins, or Schneider dominates and someone wins by a fluke. Mak barely got the upperhand at any point. It was Mak going for a move and Schneider dodging. Either way, it is sh*tty and old.
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Post by Kyzer on May 16, 2012 15:55:51 GMT -5
Why did Mak just get buried in the match? Seriously Obo, are you incapable of putting other people over in matches you write? You did it to me at the last ppv, you did it to Hutton at SB, and you did it to Mak here. I had Mak winning personally (but I am not a judge), I thought the amount of effort he put in versus the prewritten stuff you threw up deserved a better showing than this. IF this is how you are writing the ppv match, I would suggest changing it.
It doesn't do anyone any good to bury someone else, it just makes people not want to work with you. Look at Drakz and myself, we put over Elias even though he didn't show up. We didn't have to, but it wouldn't make his feud with Drakz more interesting or help his character. Putting people over is doing right by people so they do the same to you.
Now that I got that off my chest, I just want to say I enjoyed the promos that people did air. I liked Trace's and it has gotten me more interested in the Trace character than I have ever been.
I dug the stuff with Raider, it was good to see some of Ace's aggression rub off.
I am completely baffled as to what alignment Ace is now since he is just randomly destroying people these days.
All in all a great show. I am psyched about the next card for sure.
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Post by Kyzer on May 14, 2012 12:46:58 GMT -5
Oh btw, my mom was totally watching some movie the other day and Kyzer's pic base was in the the movie and I got totally caught off guard haha. I have never actually seen a movie with that actor in it. Stephen Dorff is a great actor. He has been in a lot of movies over the years. Ever since I chose him as my picbase, I can't picture anyone else being Kyzer. He has a perfect look and makes a great villain.
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Post by Kyzer on May 14, 2012 12:43:17 GMT -5
My stuff is in. Sorry to everyone that I took so long with it.
As far as parents go, I have never explored that. I have given Kyzer a brother though. I don't really reference him often though.
And I have been killing sub characters since 03 so everyone is just a sheep following my lead.
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Post by Kyzer on May 13, 2012 7:44:25 GMT -5
Have you got all the stuff from Drakz/Kyzer/Elias? No. Ex-wives on Mother's day sucks. I am finishing the match hopefully soon and I have a segment to also finish.
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Post by Kyzer on May 10, 2012 10:33:40 GMT -5
movie 1, movie 2, prequel to movie 1, movie 3, sir Kyzer.. Movie 1 doesn't work if it doesn't make sense. Which this hasn't made sense yet.
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Post by Kyzer on May 10, 2012 0:38:16 GMT -5
This was far better for me than your first. I didn't lose interest at any part. The B-Green thing didn't really hit for me but I liked the way Raider interacted with him as it really showed him as a friendly guy.
My favorite part was the end with the phone call between Alicia and Raider. It only adds to intrigue to the tumultuous relationship between the two.
The scene with Raider and Aiden reminds me of an episode of Sopranos when Tony takes AJ to his old neighborhood that has become infested with crackheads, except this had daytime alcoholics.
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Post by Kyzer on May 10, 2012 0:34:08 GMT -5
I am looking more and more forward to our match. I don't watch the biggest loser so that held little interest to me. I got the reason behind it and everything, it just didn't work due to my lack of interest in the show.
I feel like the people who are obvious faces you, Elias, Mak, and Nitta all write them so well. It is refreshing among all the heels and people who blur the line.
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Post by Kyzer on May 10, 2012 0:30:43 GMT -5
This was a good rp after being gone for so long. Good stuff. My issue is more with the content. I consider myself familiar with the Meg character and her personality, and I feel the same about Schneider. I don't understand the meshing of them. Neither of you have sold me on this romance angle. I still feel like there are unanswered questions. Raider says he got some, but I don't see where anything is answered other than Meg being in love. Still nothing have been explained. Until that comes, I am not feeling this entire angle.
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Post by Kyzer on May 10, 2012 0:20:42 GMT -5
This makes me wonder if Malakai is returning.
Good stuff here. I felt like you did well in addressing Hutton. I didn't really understand the Narrator references but I assume that is a Malakai thing.
I thought the comparison between careers was good, it showcased two very different paths for two very different characters.
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Post by Kyzer on May 10, 2012 0:16:10 GMT -5
I waited to read this until after I finished my rp and I caught several things I address in my rp. Great minds think alike. Solid work here bro. My only criticism is the lack of attention towards your match. Normally you have an even flow throughout the entire thing. Instead you devoted 19 lines to it. I just wanted more.
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Post by Kyzer on May 10, 2012 0:11:51 GMT -5
Well this was interesting. While I am not necessarily the biggest fan of reading about teenagers fooling around, this was pretty good. I think I need to get used to the character. He is definitely unique and I didn't really expect less from you.
I will say this, I hate your formatting. I had difficulty determining who was speaking at times, which made me have to re-read several parts.
Good that you are back.
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Post by Kyzer on May 9, 2012 20:29:49 GMT -5
I just lost a match by proxy 'cause I went and let real life get in the way, and now I just deleted every last PM I had by accident, 74 out of 75 of which were WFWF related. Good, good night to be David Brennan's comptroller. So do I need to resend you anything? And I did that while owner twice and it really ed things up because some weren't even read.
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Post by Kyzer on May 8, 2012 12:14:56 GMT -5
I didn't say that because Tucker Max went there and became a best selling author. When I was looking into colleges that was one of the few that my dad tried to push me towards. Of course wanting to get as far from Seattle as possible, I went to USC (not the real one in L.A.) As least you didn't come here and get stuck here. Oh I know (about Tucker), it has the credentials, but contrary to what they'll tell you, their sh*t stinks just as much as every other school. I felt pressured a little to come here myself, considering two of my cousins went to UChicago and are doing very well for themselves, although my only other options were U of I and Neumont University (Utah). I would have probably gone to U of I, better basketball team. I do nothing with my degree from South Carolina so I probably wouldn't have made the same decisions. If I had stayed in Seattle and went to UW, I would have had school paid for. Instead I paid for my own education that I don't use. Don't be a philosophy major if you don't plan on teaching or law school.
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Post by Kyzer on May 8, 2012 11:32:42 GMT -5
University of Chicago is supposed to be pretty high end school from everything I have heard. Tucker Max went there. Any high end prior to Tucker Max disappeared once he left. It's a 'good' school, I don't think it should cost near the amount we pay. Hell, I wasn't put in housing until a couple months before I came here (compared to most in the university who DID know where they were staying about a month prior). Ultimately, that proved to be advantageous because we're situated in a graduate dorm, which is SO nice. Hell, one of the undergrad dorms had one of their toilets explode. chicago.cbslocal.com/2012/03/05/u-of-c-students-dorm-is-plagued-with-exploding-toilets-other-hazards/This school has its kinda ridiculous flaws. Not to mention it's in Hyde Park, which has very little there except the school itself. There's a funny slogan about our school: Where fun goes to die. Another one is "If I wanted an A, I would have gone to Harvard." I didn't say that because Tucker Max went there and became a best selling author. When I was looking into colleges that was one of the few that my dad tried to push me towards. Of course wanting to get as far from Seattle as possible, I went to USC (not the real one in L.A.) As least you didn't come here and get stuck here.
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Post by Kyzer on May 8, 2012 3:11:27 GMT -5
I just want to apologize to everyone. I am not going to be able to finish my rp in time. I thought I would have time today but someone called out and needing the money I had to get the overtime when I could. And unfortunately I won't have time tomorrow to finish it either. I am not asking for an extension as my time issues will not change until I get off these swing shifts soon after next week. I won't say that I am not disappointed.
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Post by Kyzer on May 7, 2012 15:20:22 GMT -5
Well what are everyones MotY's so far? We're almost halfway through the year now, and we've had plenty of good matches. You can include matches that you were involved in if you would like to. Haha. Drakz/Brennan 2 That is really only contest that sticks out to me.
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Post by Kyzer on May 7, 2012 14:53:58 GMT -5
Great stuff brother, I really enjoy the interactions between Michael, E and DMK. It's interesting seeing the things you bring to the forefront of the character now that Michael is sober, such as his focused mindset, his staring over the water, thinking about things before he does them, it's all great stuff. My only issue here was a couple of times there were words missed out of sentences but only simply ones like "and" etc. I would also have liked more length as I was really getting into the RP but that just means I'll enjoy reading the next one more I guess. TNE 4 LIFE I actually proof read this before I posted it which isn't something that I normally do. I must have missed a few. I have a lot more written actually. I have put together close to 30 pages of stuff over the last two days. I just didn't want to go too far because I waiting for the next show to post the majority of it. It goes better with the next show being in Seattle. I didn't intend to write as much as I did but after I did, I had to cut it off somewhere. I am trying to leave readers wanting more, so I try to end them on a high note or something interesting.
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